Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Today’s children become tomorrow’s citizens. Therefore, allowingSo allowing them to interact with the community is very important. Moreover, every humanMore than that every human is a social being. Schools play an important role in developing children’s social skillsforming children’s social behaviours. So, in my opinion, teaching children at school is better than teaching at home.
The main reason why kids need to be sent to school is to get awareness about the society he/she will be a part of the future. Till 4-5 years, children normally with their family. Only after being sent to school will they getOnly after sending to school they will get a chance to interact with children of the same agemingle with the same age group. This will help them improvehelp them to improve communication skills, social awareness, skills for handling difficult situationsskills to handle difficult situations etc. They will be able to manage basic tasks independentlydo at least their own things themselves. Also, I think this is required to reduce their selfishness because theyselfishness- they will learn how to share in schools.
Another important factorThe other important fact is discipline. At home, kids always feel at easefeel easiness. It will always beIt will be always a tension free atmosphere for them since they are used to it from childhoodfrom the childhood. Also, parents and other family members may not be as strict as a teacher in many aspects. So it is hard to develop disciplineget discipline in life for children who do not attend schoolkids those who miss schooling. The main reason for this is the freedom they get at home.
Apart from all these disadvantages, learning at home has some merits too. The main advantage is kids will be more comfortable. Parents can decide or prioritise the topics to teach, unlike in some schools give over work-load to kids. Study timeThe time for study can be flexible so that children will get more free time. And parents may be comparatively tension free too.
In a nutshell, even though both methods have theirits own merits and demerits, parents should make important decisions about their children according to their circumstances and convenience.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay discusses meaningful benefits of both approaches, especially the social development and discipline associated with school, and uses a clear paragraph structure. Its main limitation is an inconsistent position: school is preferred initially, while the conclusion leaves the choice entirely to parental circumstances. Prioritise one stable opinion and compare the strongest school benefit directly with the flexibility offered by home education.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Relevant advantages of school and home education are discussed, but the home side is less developed and the final opinion contradicts the introduction.
Maintain one clear position throughout and explain why the chosen method's main developmental benefit outweighs the alternative's advantages.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are divided into logical paragraphs on socialisation, discipline, home learning, and the conclusion, though some links are imprecise.
Use explicit topic sentences naming each advantage and make the concluding comparison follow directly from the body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient for education and child development, but frequent unnatural expressions reduce precision and formality.
Replace phrases such as 'get awareness', 'feel easiness', 'tension free', and 'over work-load' with natural academic language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence types is attempted, but missing verbs, agreement errors, article problems, and faulty relative clauses recur.
Check that every clause has a complete verb and revise structures such as 'children normally live with their family' and 'children who miss school'.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.
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