Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
International sporting events held after every three to four year all over the world. A large number of people travel across the world to support their team during the event. Some people argue that these events bring prosperity, enthusiasm, entertainment and business for the hosting nation. Others claim that theyit could have dire consequences and severe negative effectseffect on the lives of local people. Firstly, sporting tournaments play a pivotal role in strengthening the economy of the organising country. Numerous tourists and visitors attend these events to support and boost the moralelift up the morale of their teams. Local people experienceobserve a dramatic rise in the sales of their goods and services. Secondly, sport is a source of entertainment and fun for its followers. People get the chance to meet and enjoy the performance of their favourite sports starsstar. Thirdly, it provides an opportunity to meet new people and understand their culture and traditions which could substantially reduce tensionsthat could substantially decrease the tension between the people of rival countries. International sporting events also raise a country's international profilepopularise a country to the world and thus the potential tourism industry of this country benefits from this exposuregets benefits from that. However, it is often seen that people lashburst out when their team losesas their team lose the match that could exacerbate the situation at the venuein the ground and make it a battlefield. Additionally, congestion, inadequateadequate accommodation and visitors’ safetyvisitor’s safety are athe few issues that are caused by these events. During the 2010 Football World CupDuring 2010 football world cup in Brazil, a record number of theftsthefts and stolen cases were reported. Tackling such problems requiresTo tackle such problems required enormous funds and detailed planning. Not all sports can attract international visitors and fans and thus many of these sporting events cost a lot while earning a little. To sum up, I would like to say that international events help in minimising tensions and create stronger bondsbonding among many nations. Successful occurring of event really helps in thriving the country’s economy and provides adverse advantages to its citizen. However, it also has some problems but that can be handled by imposing strict rules of laws and educating people.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response addresses both perspectives, maintains a clear favourable position, and supports its case with several relevant economic, social, and practical points. Its main limitation is recurring grammatical and collocational inaccuracy, while the benefits receive fuller development than the drawbacks. The highest priority is to proofread sentence structures and word combinations carefully, then develop the opposing view with the same specificity as the positive case.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and a clear opinion are presented, with relevant support, although the drawbacks are developed less fully than the benefits.
Develop one negative consequence through a clear cause-and-effect explanation rather than listing several problems briefly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress in a generally logical order, but the single-block presentation and mechanical sequencing weaken paragraph-level organisation.
Use distinct introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, grouping related advantages and disadvantages into clear central topics.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonably broad topic-specific vocabulary, but inaccurate collocations and word choices recur.
Replace imprecise combinations such as references to event occurrence and advantages with natural, context-appropriate wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms conveys the argument, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and clause construction reduce control.
Proofread each sentence for a complete verb phrase and correct subject-verb agreement before checking articles and noun forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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