Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
Sample Response
In recent years, large multinational corporations arethe operation of big corporations is ubiquitous in developing nations. This essay arguesThe essay will first suggest that economic growth is the prime benefit, while the excessive use of developingemergent nations’ natural resources is the main drawback. One evident benefit of the operation of multinationaltransitional companies in less developed countries is the growthprosperity of the local economy. That is to say, multinationalmultination companies provide an inflow of capital into developing countries. This investment not only creates job opportunities for the people in developing nationsbut also helps, but it also helps to build better infrastructure, such as bridges, roads, and transportation facilities, for them. For example, foreign direct investmentthe role of Foreign Direct Investment in 2010in the year 2010 had a clear impact because itwas undeniable because it rapidly boosted the Indian economyuplifted the Indian economy so fast by increasing GDP and creatingand increased GDP and created many jobs for local peopleso many jobs for locals. The prime disadvantage is that these companies use the natural resources of developing nations recklessly, which affects the environment. In particularIn other words, smallerSmaller, less developed governments often trade access to natural resources for increased revenuetrade an increase in revenue for access to natural resources. This extraction of raw materials, such as oil, diamondsdiamond, rubber and fuel, can cause environmental damage, includingenvironmental externalities- polluted rivers and loss of natural landscapeslandscape. For instance, many Chinese private enterprises have been heavily criticised for using the resources of countries like Vietnam, Thailand and the PhilippinesPhilippine and for polluting the environment. In conclusion, huge global companies benefit less developed nation economically is the prime advantage of this, and the extraction of raw materials for profitfor the sake of profit is the main disadvantage.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear advantage and disadvantage, and both are supported with relevant explanation and examples. Its main limitation is presentation as one continuous paragraph, compounded by several inaccurate word choices and an ungrammatical concluding sentence. Prioritise dividing the argument into a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, then proofread collocations and sentence structure for greater precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both sides directly and develops each main idea with explanation and a relevant example.
Use more specific and credible evidence to substantiate the economic and environmental claims rather than relying on broad assertions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a logical advantage-disadvantage sequence, but the lack of paragraph breaks weakens organisation and readability.
Divide the essay into separate introduction, advantage, disadvantage, and conclusion paragraphs with clear internal topic focus.
Lexical Resource
There is a good range of topic vocabulary, though several inaccurate choices and forms reduce precision.
Correct expressions such as 'transitional companies,' 'multination companies,' and 'emergent nations' by using accurate established collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The essay uses varied complex structures with generally clear control, despite several local errors and a seriously faulty concluding sentence.
Recast the conclusion into complete clauses and proofread agreement, capitalization, punctuation, and plural forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
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