Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Sample Response

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Many today feel that it is crucial for younger generations to follow the traditions of their country rather than their own individual inclinations. In my opinion, though there is value to such self-expression, upholding tradition is more important.

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Those who supportare in support of younger people prioritising their individuality argue that this is keyargue this is key to happiness. The true pursuit of happiness requires an individual to define their goals and accomplish them on their own terms. An example illustrating this pointA counterexample illustrating this point would be the rigid, hierarchical societies of the past wherein women had fewer opportunities for self-expressionfewer rights of self-expression. Most women in the past did not receive an education and were effectively blocked from having a career or a lifea career or life outside the traditional confines of the housewife roletraditional confines of a housewife. The narrow range of experiences on offer meant that most women struggled to findwere unable to struggle to find their own version of happiness.

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However, since social norms today conflict less with individual freedomthe stigmas of society today are less in conflict with individuals, it is logical to prioritise tradition. Traditions themselves may be forgotten if not respected and adhered to. For example, in many indigenous cultures, younger people are more interested in migrating from their ancestral homes to the cities to lead a modern life. If this occurs on a large enough scaleoccurs in enough numbers, then thousands of distinctunique, distinct cultures will fade into the seemingly inevitable global monoculture. Once this happens, there will be no way to revive past traditionsretrieve and enliven past traditions and they will become relics of history rather than living monuments to diversity, creativity, and human ingenuity.

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In conclusion, though individual freedom is important, particularly for repressed segments of society, there is greater value in preserving past ways of life. This is difficult to achieveenforce but governments should seek to encourage the latter instead of the former.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

This is a confident, well-developed response with a clear position, relevant discussion of both views, and especially strong control of complex language and progression. Its main limitation is occasional imprecision in phrasing and reasoning, particularly where the example of women's restricted opportunities is linked to young people's individuality. The highest-priority improvement is to make every example more directly parallel to the task's focus on younger generations and social traditions.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

8.0
Scoring rule

Both views and the writer's opinion are addressed clearly with relevant, substantially developed support.

Next step

Make the first supporting example more explicitly about young people's freedom from social traditions.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

8.0
Scoring rule

The argument progresses logically through well-focused paragraphs, with cohesive devices used naturally and unobtrusively.

Next step

Strengthen the transition into the pro-tradition argument by stating the logical contrast more precisely.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.5
Scoring rule

A wide and flexible vocabulary conveys nuanced ideas, although a few collocations are strained or imprecise.

Next step

Replace awkward combinations such as societies being in conflict with individuals with more idiomatic phrasing.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0
Scoring rule

A wide range of complex structures is used accurately, with only isolated non-impeding lapses.

Next step

Edit the few syntactically awkward clauses so that every complex sentence expresses its intended relationship cleanly.

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Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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