Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this viewpoint and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
It is generally believed that there are many health and environmental benefits to vegetarianism. While I agreeWhile I do agree with this view, I do not think that vegetarianism is for everyone. The consumption of animal products certainly has some adverse health effectshas some health consequences. It also harms the environmenthurts the environment as well. Some studies have shown that vegetarians tend to live longer than their meat- or fish-eating counterpartsmeat or fish-eating counterparts. The environmental impacts of diets containing animal productsimpacts of non-vegetarianism are even worse. Countless animals are raised, abused and slaughtered to fulfil the demand for meat and fish worldwide. FarmingFraming livestock is one of the major causes of greenhouse gas emissions worldwide. If we can reduce the consumption of meat, the need to raise more animalsthe need for raising more animals is also reducedalso reduces. As a result, the land currently usedthe land that is being used to raise them can instead be used to growcan be altered to grow vegetables, which in turn producevegetables which in turn produce clean air for the whole planet. Obviously, reducing consumptioncutting down on the consumption of animal products benefits the whole world. However, meat and fish are an integral part of many cuisines; therefore, being a vegetarian is not an option in many regions of the world. To illustrate, sushi is the most popular Japanese delicacy and without fish, its main ingredientwithout the addition of its main ingredient, fish, sushi wouldwill not be complete. Meat consumption is particularly common in cold countries. There are also some regions where it is difficult to grow vegetables and cereals. Furthermore, fish and meat are excellent sources of proteinproteins and some fatty acids crucial for good health. For this season, meat consumption is essential for people who engage in strenuous physical activitiespeople engaging in strenuous physical activities. Being a vegetarianBeing vegetarian, for example, is not a viable option for a bodybuilder or an athlete. In conclusion, even though there are advantages to vegetarianism, I believe that this lifestyle is not for everyone. Even so, in my opinion, everyone should make an effort to cut down on their consumption of animal productsfoods. That way, they canThat way they can improve their health and reduce large quantities of greenhouse gas emissionssave the planet from tons of greenhouse gases.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear, nuanced position: reducing animal-food consumption benefits health and the environment, although complete vegetarianism may not suit every person or region. Its strongest feature is the breadth of relevant health, emissions, geography, and nutrition points. The main limitation is that several supporting claims are overstated or inaccurate, and the one-paragraph format blurs progression; prioritise using evidence-based qualifications and separating benefits from practical limitations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The viewpoint and a clear qualified opinion are developed through relevant health, environmental, cultural, geographical, and nutritional considerations.
Replace absolute claims about vegetables, athletes, and regional diets with accurate evidence and explain more precisely who may face genuine constraints.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses recognisably from benefits to limitations and a balanced conclusion, but the entire response is presented as one paragraph.
Create separate body paragraphs for health and environmental benefits, then practical and nutritional limitations.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for diet, health, agriculture, and emissions, though several word choices, collocations, and typographical errors reduce precision.
Use accurate phrases such as ‘livestock farming’, ‘convert land’, ‘sources of protein’, and ‘for this reason’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of structures communicates the argument clearly, but agreement, conditional form, reference, and sentence-boundary errors recur.
Keep conditional sequences consistent and check agreement in clauses describing reduced demand, land use, and dietary benefits.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this viewpoint and give your own opinion.
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