Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people?
Sample Response
Nowadays, it can be observed that a number of groupsa number groups or organisations are proliferating in society. These are mainly classified into public and private groups. I will shedthrough light on the importance of these groups in the following paragraphs. Public groups or associations engage in solving problems in society or a local communityin society or in a community. Let us take the case of Lions Clubclub inof our community, it is a public group which deals withtakes care of about general issues related to water supply, roads and security of our locality. The members of this group are senior citizens, retired people from work and they are volunteers. Last year this club did an excellent jobhad done an excellent job in protecting our locality from chemical pollution by blocking the establishment of a chemical plantestablishment of chemical industry near our residential areanear to our residential area. This club collected votes from the people against the company's proposed facilitycompany establishment and petitionedaddressed the government to revokeabolish the permission. Such groups are important for improving societyfor society improvement. Next, there are private groups which are formed only for members' benefitmember's benefits. Private groups belong to a sector or domain. For exampleTo illustrate such as, I am a member of TIBCO technology group, whichthis is formed by people who work on TIBCO software. There are 400 membersThere 400 members in this group from various organisations; we sharevarious organisations, we share knowledge related to our technology, job openings in our technology and we provide job reference to group members. This kind of private clubclubs helps the members to grow officially. In summary, people are realising the importance of associations and we can expect a myriad of them in future.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response answers the question directly and supports two relevant reasons with concrete public-service and professional-network examples. Its strongest feature is the specificity of those illustrations, while the main limitation is that frequent sentence-level errors and awkward expressions weaken precision and sometimes interrupt the flow. The highest-priority improvement is to express each reason in clean, controlled sentences before adding supporting detail.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay gives a clear answer through two relevant benefits of groups and supports both with specific community and professional examples.
State the personal or social benefit before each example and explain more explicitly how collective membership produces that benefit.
Coherence and Cohesion
The public-versus-private structure creates clear overall progression, but long comma-spliced sentences and limited paragraphing weaken local flow.
Use separate body paragraphs for the two group types and divide each example into a reason, illustration, and consequence.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough range to discuss community action and professional networking, though several word choices and collocations are inaccurate.
Replace expressions such as abolish the permission and grow officially with revoke approval and develop professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of structures is attempted, but errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, possessives, and sentence boundaries occur frequently.
Check every clause for a subject and finite verb, then correct forms such as a number of groups, there are, and clubs help.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people?
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