The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.
Sample Response
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of males and females who were arrested from 1989 to 1994, while the bar chart compares the main reasons for the most recent arrests of each gendermain reasons that the different genders were arrested most recently. It is evident from the charts that a higher proportion of males than females were arrestedmales were arrested more than females and that public drinking was the most common reason for arrest for both. To begin, the proportion of males arrested was much greater than that of femalesthan for females. 32% were arrested compared to only 9% for women. Turning to the reasons for the most recent arrests, there were some clear differences between men and women. Men were almost twice as likely as women to be arrested for drink drivingtwice as likely to be arrested for drink driving than women, at 26% and 14% respectively. Breach of order, theft, and other reasons were also slightly higher for men, with these figures ranging from about 12% to 19% across both sexesall these offences standing in the range of 12-18% for both sexes. Interestingly though, women had higher proportions of arrestswomen experienced a higher percentage of arrest rates for assault and public drinking. The figures for assault were fairly similar, at about 17% for men and 19% for womenfigures for assault were fairly similar at approximately 18%, whereas public drinking represented the main reason for arrest, with women at about 38%a massive 38%, compared to 31% for men. In a small percentage of cases, no answer was given.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response gives a clear, accurate account of the principal patterns and supports them with well-selected comparisons, while its language is generally fluent and varied. Its main limitation is slight imprecision when grouping some arrest reasons, alongside a few awkward expressions. The highest priority is to preserve the strong overview while reporting every grouped category with exact figures and more neutral, precise wording.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and well-selected comparisons accurately cover nearly all major information in both charts.
Report grouped categories with exact values and distinguish small gender differences more precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses logically from the overview to arrest rates and then to the reasons for arrest.
Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and detailed comparisons to make the structure even easier to scan.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, with effective language for comparison and proportion.
Replace emphatic or awkward phrases with neutral statistical wording and more natural collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of sentence forms is handled accurately, and the few slips do not hinder meaning.
Refine comparative patterns and noun phrases so that every complex sentence reads naturally.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.
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