The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.
Sample Response
The bar chart delineates the ratio of British people who moved overseas over three years.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart the that highest number of British natives expatriate themself in Australia and Spain was the second-largest destination for them.
In detail, British emigrantsimmigrants moving to Australia numberedchose the country of Australia to begin at 40,000 in 2004, and this amount declined by about 2,000declined nearby 2000 after one year. Following thisthese, the figure rose to 51,00051,000 people shifted to Australia in 2006, and the figure then fell to approximately 43,000 emigrantsratio fluctuated, limited to approximately 43,000 individuals who got settled in the final year. Moreover, 33,000 people moved to Spaingot settled down in the nation of Spain, and this figurestrength was similar in the first two yearsremained the same in two years, before fallingbut a little inclination was observed and plunged to below 30,000 in 2007.
Furthermore, British people moved to New Zealandwere not comfortable to move New Zealand beginning at 22,000 in 2004, but this figure declined steadilythis amount continuously declined, and the figure reached 20,00020,000 people remained in this country in 2007. therefore in 2004 British people adopt the culture of the USA starting at nearly 23000 thousand, and this value plummeted below the 20,000 in 2005 a small inclination observes at 24,000 and end up with 20,000 of people departure to the USA. The figure for France also fluctuatedNext in France also had fluctuated number of movers startingstarted at 22,000 and this value rose to above 30,000spiked above at 30,000 and fell again totook a nose dive again at 19,000 approximately in 2007.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response covers all five destinations and includes a recognizable overview, with several values and trends reported approximately accurately. Its main limitation is that recurrent grammar and word-choice errors make comparisons awkward, while the overview gives only the ranking of Australia and Spain and misses the broader decline and fluctuation patterns. Prioritize precise comparative language and accurate sentence structures, then summarize the main trends more fully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview identifies Australia and Spain as the leading destinations, and all five countries are covered, though some figures are approximate and broader trend contrasts are omitted.
Contrast the sustained declines in Spain and New Zealand with the fluctuations in Australia, the USA and France, using the chart values precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses a logical introduction-overview-detail structure, but several connectors are mechanical or illogical and the final paragraph becomes difficult to follow.
Group destinations by similar trends and use simple, accurate linking phrases to make each comparison and time sequence clear.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in trend vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations such as references to ratios, strength and adopting culture reduce precision.
Use standard chart language consistently, including figures, emigrants, rose, fell, peaked and remained stable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries sometimes obscure meaning.
Build shorter comparison sentences with a clear subject and finite verb, then check tense, agreement and punctuation in each one.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.
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