The plans show how a coastal land has developed into a coastal park.
Sample Response
The maps illustrate the development of coastal land into a coastal park.
Overall, the land has undergonewill witness a radical transformation with the addition of a lake and woodsvarious green elements and visitorentertainment facilities, as well as the removaleradication of the former land uses and farm buildingsexisting farming buildings and areas.
At the road entranceStarting from the road entrance, the farm buildings have been replaced by a car parkwill be replaced with a car parking area. The unused land and the area formerly used for animalsanimal-inhabited area on the westWest side have been transformed into a lakewill be transformed into a small lake, encircled by a footpath connected to the car parksurrounded by trees and a trail extending from the car park. Meanwhile, the agricultural land on the eastEast side has been converted into woodswill be completely renovated with new trees planted, a footpath linking the car park with the woodsa footpath leading from the parking lot through the woods, and a small café located north of the woods beside the roadsmall café located above the greenery and near the road. At the bottom of the map, steps will be added to the cliffs to enable guests to cross over to the beach and enjoy the comfort of several newly-added benches.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response is concise, fluent, and organized around a clear overview and a logical tour of the site, accurately covering the car park, lake, woods, café, footpaths, and beach access. Its main weakness is factual accuracy because it invents trees around the lake and several benches that do not appear in the plans. Remove unsupported details and describe only features visibly shown in the before-and-after maps.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies nearly all major changes and provides a clear overview, but it adds trees around the lake and benches that are absent from the plans.
Cross-check every claimed addition against the after-development plan and omit features that are not visibly represented.
Coherence and Cohesion
The description progresses coherently from the entrance across the western and eastern areas to the beach, with effective paragraphing and linking.
Maintain this spatial route while separating the final cluster of coastal changes into a shorter sentence for maximum clarity.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of map language, although expressions such as “animal-inhabited area,” “eradication,” and “enjoy the comfort” are not fully natural or precise.
Prefer direct map-description terms such as “animal area,” “removal,” and “seating” where the visual supports them.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are varied and accurately controlled throughout, with clear modification and subordination despite some lengthy sentences.
Refine long sentences by limiting each one to a smaller set of spatial changes while preserving the existing grammatical accuracy.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans show how a coastal land has developed into a coastal park.
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