The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.
Sample Response
The chart gives information regarding the money spent on consumer goods, namelyconsumer goods namely photographic film, toys, CDs, perfumes, tennis racquets and personal stereos by four4 countries in Europe (Britain, France, Italy and Germany). The units are in thousands of pounds sterlingPound Sterling. Overall, British, among the four countries, spent most of their money in all the six consumer goods in contrast with Germany spending the least amount for those products.
BritainBritish also spent the highest amount to purchase photographic filmfilms while France spent the least amount on tennis racquets. In terms of photographic film, Britain spent about 170 thousand poundswell above 170 thousand pounds. This is the largest amount spenthighest money spent on any consumer goodgoods. France came in the second position in terms of its spending, whichtheir spending which was approximately 165 thousandmore or less 165 thousand. Italians and Germans compared to the two latter countries, spent around 150,000 and 145,000 respectively. Toys and CDs are the second and third most purchased by the 4 countries. Furthermore, Britain and France spent the least on tennis racquetsBritain and France purchased tennis racquets the least with only around 155000 and 145000 respectively. Italy spent the least onItaly spent the least of their money in buying personal stereos with about 150,000,exactly 150000 while Germany spentsame as well in Germany spending around 3000 pounds fewer than that of Italy.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies Britain as the dominant spender and provides several accurate figures for photographic film, giving the report a clear central comparison. However, the overview wrongly presents Germany as the lowest spender for every product, and the detail coverage is selective and sometimes imprecise. The highest priority is to compare all six categories systematically and verify each stated minimum, maximum, and figure against the chart.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report identifies Britain's general dominance and some correct figures, but its overview overgeneralises Germany's position and coverage of the six goods is incomplete.
Select the main comparisons across every category and check claims about the lowest spender against the visual before reporting them.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and overview establish a direction, but one long detail paragraph groups figures unevenly and some comparisons are difficult to follow.
Organise the details into two clear comparison groups and keep each sentence focused on one product or related trend.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to describe spending and rankings, although several expressions are awkward or imprecise, such as references to countries purchasing goods.
Use precise chart language such as spent, expenditure, highest, lowest, and respectively, with countries consistently treated as the spenders.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the main meaning, but article, agreement, modifier, and sentence-construction errors recur.
Review each complex sentence for a clear subject and verb, accurate articles, and correctly placed comparison phrases.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.
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