The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
Sample Response
The visual presentation of the table graph enumerated the business in a local restaurant of a downtown district in a week of October. The figures are presentedThe whole data has been calibrated in dollars. Overall, the restaurant's dinner sales weredinner sales amount was higher than lunch salesthat of lunch and weekend sales weresales during weekends was lower than sales on weekdaysthat of a regular weekday. As is shown in the illustration, for lunch salesin case of lunch sales, Wednesday's sales showedWednesday sales exhibit the highest figure, at $2,595a higher figure (2595 dollars) than other weekdays. By contrast,Whilst the restaurant's lunch sales on Sunday were the lowestsale amount on Sunday was the least (1550 dollars). It is interesting to notice that sales on the first two days of the weekthe business in the first two days of the week (Monday and Tuesday) were similar: lunch sales werewas almost the same, lunch sale accounted for roughly $2400 and dinner sales exceeded $3,600dinner sale over $3600. But on Wednesday, dinner sales felldinner sale abruptly decreases to 3445 dollars while lunch generated slightly more revenuea slightly more revenue than the previous days. On the 5th day of the week, lunch sales decreased but dinner sale increased. The restaurant's overall sales on Friday werewas the highest but weekend sales were lower than weekday salessales amount on weekends were comparatively lower.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response identifies the main sales patterns and supports them with several accurate weekday figures, especially the lunch peak and stronger dinner trade. Its main limitation is incomplete coverage of the week and some vague or slightly misleading comparisons, compounded by frequent awkward phrasing and agreement errors. Prioritise clearer comparisons across all seven days and edit each sentence for accurate verb forms and natural data-reporting language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several accurate figures identify the principal patterns, though some days and comparisons receive little or imprecise coverage.
Compare the weekday peaks with both weekend lows and report the omitted Sunday dinner figure to give fuller coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses logically from the overview to supporting details, but the single-paragraph structure and some abrupt links weaken organisation.
Separate the overview and details into clear paragraphs and group comparisons consistently by meal or part of the week.
Lexical Resource
The response uses adequate data-reporting vocabulary, but several unnatural choices such as 'calibrated' and 'enumerated the business' reduce precision.
Use straightforward collocations such as 'the table shows sales' and 'revenue rose or fell' instead of unnecessarily elaborate wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the meaning, although agreement, tense, and article errors occur repeatedly.
Check subject-verb agreement and keep past tense consistent when describing the restaurant's sales for the recorded week.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
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