The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries.
Sample Response
The presented chart provides information aboutgives information on the challenges different age groupsthe different age groups of people face when movingimmigrating to another country.
The chart shows thatAs is presented, the three challenges shownthree most common challenges faced by all age groupsall age groups face are making friends, finding a place to live and learning the local dialect. The biggest difficulty the age group of people aged over 55 faces is learning the local language as compared to the other age groups, who don’t find it as difficult. It is surprising to find that both the 18–34 and 35–54 age groupsboth age groups of 18-34 and 35-54 have challenges in finding a place to settle. It is easier for the age group of over 55 to find a place to settle as they do not have to take many factors into consideration when deciding where to settle, for example, finding a place close to work, what kind of neighbourhood is good for bringing up a family, what public facilities are available in the area, access to the internet etc. But they don’t have a hard time making friends as it is probably easier for them to do when still young.
To summarise, according to this chart, it is easier to go and live in another country while you are still young rather than when you are over the age of 55 as it is more difficult for you to adapt to the new culture and customs in a new country.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is clearly organised and uses a reasonably varied vocabulary to identify the three challenges and the especially high language difficulty among people over 55. However, it omits every percentage and replaces important comparisons with unsupported speculation, leading to a questionable conclusion that moving abroad is generally easier when young. Prioritise precise data comparisons across age groups and remove causal explanations not shown by the chart.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Some broad patterns are identified, but no percentages are reported, key contrasts are underdeveloped, and much of the response speculates beyond the chart.
Report and compare the figures for each challenge across the three age groups, avoiding explanations or conclusions unsupported by the data.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, main discussion, and conclusion create a clear overall structure, but a long speculative section and an unclear pronoun reference weaken progression.
Organise the body around two or three direct numerical comparisons and ensure every pronoun has an unmistakable referent.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally appropriate, with effective items such as "immigrating," "neighbourhood," and "adapt," despite some repetition and imprecision.
Prefer exact chart terms such as "local language" and vary repeated references to age groups without sacrificing clarity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a range of complex structures with generally clear meaning, though several awkward constructions and reference errors reduce accuracy.
Simplify overloaded sentences and revise phrases such as "the age group of over 55" to "people aged over 55."
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries.
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