The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.
Sample Response
The pie chartsyielded pie charts demonstrate how people access the news in Australia and Canada.
Overall, it can be seen that television and online news are the most prioritised way although not specified have the least in both countries.
For Canada, two fifth percentage of people like to access news by the TV while 36% of update themselves by digital platforms, which has the second-highest proportion. Print or tabloid medium has double percentage than radio has. In addition, 3% of CanadiansCanadian used an unspecified sourceget widow is not specified.
InFor Australia, access to online newsonline accessing news is just overabove halfa half percentage which was 16 percentage points higherwhich has 16% more than in Canada, whilethan has in Canada although, television accounted for roughly the same share as online news in Canadavia television has roughly the same percentage as online has in Canada. Moreover, radio and unspecified sources, both at 2%,with 2% radio and not specified had equal shareshas similar people preference. Print newsThe print accounted for half the share recorded in Canadahas half proportion of access to daily updates than has in Canada.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its accurate coverage of the principal proportions and cross-country contrasts, including the leading online figure in Australia and the paired lowest categories. The main limitation is that pervasive grammatical and lexical errors repeatedly strain clarity, compounded by the slight shortfall in length; prioritise rewriting each comparison as a complete, accurately formed sentence while retaining the sound data selection.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Despite being slightly under length, the response presents a valid overview and accurately reports nearly all major percentages and comparisons in both countries.
Meet the minimum length by adding one clearly worded comparison, such as Australia’s much stronger preference for online news over television.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, overview, and country-by-country paragraphs create clear overall progression, although faulty clause linking makes several comparisons hard to follow.
Give each main comparison its own sentence and use simple connectors such as ‘whereas’ or ‘compared with’ accurately.
Lexical Resource
There is a reasonable range of chart vocabulary, but frequent miscollocations such as ‘two fifth percentage’, ‘update themselves’, and ‘online accessing news’ reduce clarity.
Use precise forms such as ‘two fifths of Canadians’, ‘accessed news online’, and ‘accounted for the largest proportion’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex comparisons are attempted, but frequent errors in clause structure, agreement, articles, and comparative forms sometimes impede understanding.
Write complete subject-verb clauses and check each comparison for correct forms such as ‘16 percentage points higher than’ and ‘half the proportion’.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.
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