The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.
Sample Response
The two charts illustrate the devicesappliances that young adults in Canada use to watch television programmes and how this has changed over the ten-year period from 2009 to 2019. One of the key changes over this decade is the transition from conventional televisions to flat-screen TVsflat-screens, with the former falling from 34% to 4% and the latter rising from 8% to 27% overfor the period, making it the most widely used television devicenumber one television device. The latter has replaced the former as the most popular TV viewing device.
Another general trend is that younger people are now watching television on smaller, more portable devices than in 2009. In particular, the use of mobile phones and tablets for viewing purposes has increased by almost three quarters to 26% and tablet use seeing an almost four-fold increase to 19%. This trend is reinforced by the decline in computer use among 18 to 25-year-oldsby the number of 18 to 25-year-olds using computers for TV viewingfor the TV viewing. Both desktop and laptop computers saw substantial falls in usage (by about a third for desktops and two fifths for laptops)(around a third for both).
Overall,Overall then, it can be said that the two pie charts suggest the TV viewing habits in Canada over the period saw a move away from older devices and towards more modern equivalents.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response identifies the principal shift from conventional televisions to flat-screen and portable devices and supports it with mostly accurate figures and comparisons. Its main limitation is selective numerical coverage and occasional imprecision in summarising the computer categories, while some awkward grammar reduces fluency. The highest-priority improvement is to compare all six categories systematically, giving precise starting and ending figures in clearly grouped sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and accurate figures capture the dominant changes, with all device groups at least mentioned.
Strengthen coverage by giving exact start-to-end comparisons for mobile phones, tablets, laptops, and desktop computers rather than combining or approximating them.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from the main television shift to portable devices and computers, although the overview is split and partly repetitive.
Place one concise overview immediately after the introduction and remove the repeated statement about flat-screen televisions replacing conventional sets.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, though expressions such as 'appliances', 'number one television device', and 'for the TV viewing' are awkward.
Use natural chart-reporting collocations such as 'devices', 'largest share', and 'watching television' consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex structures is mostly controlled, but faulty coordination in 'and tablet use seeing' and several awkward constructions interrupt fluency.
Check that each coordinated clause has a complete finite verb and revise compressed comparative sentences for grammatical parallelism.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.
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