The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
Sample Response
The bar chartcolumn graph compares the percentages of male and female teachersmale and female teachers’ ratio in six different types of educational settinglevels of educational institutions in the United Kingdom in 2010. As an overall trend, private training institutes and universitiescolleges and universities in the UK had more male lecturers while more female teachers were employed in lower levelslowers grades. As can be seen from the diagram, the percentage of female teachersratio of female instructors in the UK in 2010 was muchquite higher in nursery/pre-school and primary educationin the nursery and elementary levels as the percentages weretheir percentage was around 90%. The percentage of female teachersThe female academics at secondary-school levelin secondary level was just over halfjust above the half while equal proportionsan exact ratio of male and female lecturers could be observed in colleges. A contrasting scenario was visible in universities and private training institutes as male teachers dominated these two educational settings. AtIn university level, 3 females were employed against 7 male mentors while this ratio was 4 by 5 in private institutes who provided training courses. In summary, male teachers in the UK was higher in numbers in upper grades while this was completely opposite in primary and pre-school levels.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response covers all six settings and uses a generally clear lower-level-to-higher-level comparison, with most figures represented accurately. Its main weakness is an inaccurate overview claim that colleges had more men, despite the chart and a later sentence showing an equal split; some ratio wording and grammar are also imprecise. Prioritise making the overview fully accurate and consistent, then state percentages directly and proofread agreement and prepositions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All six settings are addressed with mostly accurate comparisons, but the overview incorrectly groups colleges with male-dominated universities.
State the central pattern accurately: women predominated in nursery, primary and secondary education, colleges were equal, and men predominated in the final two settings.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a sensible progression across educational levels, but the repeated concluding overview and the contradiction about colleges weaken cohesion.
Present one accurate overview after the introduction, then organise the details into female-dominated, equal and male-dominated groups.
Lexical Resource
There is useful range in terms such as "instructors," "academics" and "dominated," though several ratio and education-level expressions lack precision.
Prefer direct percentage language and standard phrases such as "at university level," "an equal split" and "approximately 57% male."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence structures show some variety, but recurring errors in agreement, articles and prepositions reduce grammatical control.
Proofread constructions such as "female academics were," "at university level" and "the number of male teachers was higher."
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
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