The graph gives information about the drinking habits of the US population by age.
Sample Response
The bar chart comparesillustrates the comparison of four types of drinking habits among people by age groupof persons as per their age group in the United States. The data analysis in the percentage of drinkers for US citizens.
According to the data, more than 60% of people aged 16 to 24people with age group between 16 to 24 never drink alcoholnever touched the alcohol whileat the other hand nearly 5% are heavy drinkersnearly 5% person’s addicted to heavy drinking habits while less than 10% are ex-drinkershave absenteeism of drinking wine. At the same time with the young age group of 25-34 except light drinking which is more than 30% peoples have identical habits of the age group for 16-24.
It is quite interesting that people drink alcoholpeoples love to drink alcohol among the 35-to-54 age groupsbetween the age group of 35 to 54 years , while the proportion is lower& where it is downwards side in older age groupssenior citizens compared to young ones. The proportion of ex-drinkersrate of foreswear habit of alcohol rapidly increased as people get olderwhile people getting more older and the proportion of never-drinkersnever drinking popularity fallsfalling off with increasing age.
Overall highest drinker ratio is observed in the age group of 45 to 54; Light drinkers are age group of 25 to 34 years for which concerned authorities had to take already imperative decisions which almost 40% of Americans forget to drink while they have aged to 65 and above.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response identifies a few important patterns, especially the decline in never-drinkers with age and the high light-drinking share among 25–34-year-olds. However, several comparisons are unclear or inaccurate, and frequent awkward phrasing makes the description difficult to follow. Prioritise a precise overview of the main age trends, then support it with accurately labelled percentages and straightforward comparative sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response reports some relevant figures and trends, but its overview is confused and several claims about the highest drinking group and age comparisons are inaccurate or unsupported.
State the main visual trends accurately, including falling never-drinking, rising ex-drinking, and the correct peaks for light and heavy drinking, before adding selected figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing is visible, but progression is weak because ideas are loosely connected and several long sentences combine unrelated observations.
Organise the report into a clear overview followed by two logically grouped detail paragraphs, with one comparison developed at a time.
Lexical Resource
Some topic vocabulary is attempted, but frequent inappropriate choices such as “absenteeism,” “foreswear habit,” and “forget to drink” obscure the intended meaning.
Use precise chart language such as “never-drinkers,” “ex-drinkers,” “proportion,” “rose,” and “declined,” and avoid unfamiliar words whose meanings do not fit.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in agreement, articles, plurals, clause structure, and comparisons regularly reduce clarity despite a few successful sentence forms.
Build shorter comparative sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, countable nouns, articles, and age-range expressions.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph gives information about the drinking habits of the US population by age.
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