The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China.
Sample Response
The bar graph depicts information about motor vehicle ownershipmotorised vehicle possessions in China during a twelve-year period - from 1987 tountil 1999.
In general, the number of automobiles owned by Chinese citizens rose sharply overall, especially after 1993increased gradually and marked a noticeable change in vehicle ownership during the period shownobserved times.
Looking at the details, vehicle ownership in China in 1987 stood at aboutpertained a figure about 30 vehicles per thousand peopleindividuals. This number swelled modestly between the year of 1987 and before 1995 reaching about 100 vehicles per thousand people by 1993which was about 10% vehicles ownership. Furthermore, in 1995, the number of car possessions went up dramatically, about 200 vehicles and was doublewas double than the previous number. This figure grew significantly through the following years and in 1999, and it accounted for a steep increase, about 425 vehiclesalmost 4,10 vehicles per thousand citizens. The chart showsThe figure extremely noticed a significant change in vehicle ownership between 1987 and 1999. In 1999, it was reckoned approximately twelve times higher than the level of vehicle ownershiprate of vehicle possessions in China in 1987.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report identifies the overall upward trend and selects several important figures, with a recognisable introduction, overview, and supporting detail. Its main limitation is accuracy and clarity: an unsupported percentage, a malformed final value, unnatural data-reporting phrases, and comparison errors obscure parts of the description. Prioritise reporting every figure consistently as vehicles per thousand people and organising the details into a clear early modest rise followed by the sharp post-1993 increase.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the overall rise and includes several key figures from the chart, including the low starting point, the sharp mid-1990s increase, and the high final value. Accuracy is weakened by unclear wording around the early years, the unsupported percentage reference, and the malformed final figure.
State the overview as a sharp rise, especially after 1993, and report each value in vehicles per thousand people without changing the unit into a percentage.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report has a clear introduction, overview, and detail paragraph, but progression inside the detail paragraph is overloaded and some referencing is repetitive.
Separate the early modest rise from the later steep rise, and use clearer time sequencing such as by 1993, in 1995, in 1997, and finally in 1999.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is generally adequate for a chart report, but several collocations are unnatural, including vehicle possessions, observed times, and the figure noticed a change.
Use standard data-reporting phrases such as vehicle ownership, over the period, rose to, and reached approximately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is usually clear, but there are frequent errors in verb patterns, comparison forms, and sentence control.
Revise comparison grammar, especially double the previous figure, twelve times higher than, and was about 30 vehicles per thousand people.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China.
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