The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.
Sample Response
The line graph illustrates changes in wheat exports from Australia, Canada and the European Communitywheat export by Australia, Canada, and the European Community over the six-year periodwithin a five-year period - from 1985 to 1990. Overall, what stands out of the graph is that wheat exports from the European Communitywheat export by the European Community increased over the period, whereas Australia's exports showedAustralia witnessed a gradual decrease overallin the period considered. Although wheat exports of the three areas fluctuated, Canada had the highest oscillations throughout the interim. DeleteOne of the first things to note is that Canada was the country whose wheat exports amounted towheat exportation comprised 19 million tonnesnearly 20 million tons in 1985. In the following year, the export volumethe rate of export fell and then quickly recovered, reachingquickly recovered reaching a peak of 25 million tonnestons in 1988. However, this figure fluctuated over the years, finishing surprisingly the same as it was at the starting point. European Community initially exported less than Canada, but its outcome turned out more than the other two countries at the final point- over 20 tons. Unlike the other two seriesIn contrast to the other two areas, Australia exported 15 million tonnes15 tons in 1985 and saw a slight decrease over the period except in 1986.
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Why this response received Band 7.0
The report presents a relevant overview of the three main trends and selects useful figures, especially Canada's 1988 peak and the contrasting directions of Europe and Australia. However, it inaccurately says Canada finished at its starting level and some descriptions are thin or imprecise. The strongest improvement would be to verify end values carefully and compare the three series at key turning points.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and Canada's peak are identified, but the claim that Canada ended at its starting value is inaccurate.
Report the 1990 endpoints accurately and add a direct comparison around 1988-1990, when the rankings changed.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear overview and broadly logical progression, though the single-block development and some abrupt links weaken organisation.
Separate the overview from grouped detail paragraphs and connect each series through clearly ordered time comparisons.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate range for describing trends, but several choices such as highest oscillations, exportation comprised, and outcome are imprecise.
Use conventional graph language such as fluctuated most, exports stood at, peaked at, and finished at.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex sentences with generally good control, despite occasional missing articles and punctuation slips.
Proofread article use and clause boundaries, particularly before European Community and around participial phrases such as reaching a peak.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.
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