For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter: - state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this - give details on how you have benefited from the club - explain why you want to leave
Sample Response
Dear Mrs Watson, I am a Gold memberfull-time Gold member of your club 'Fitness Shield'. My membership started on 5 August 2024a year ago, on 5th August 2024, and it is valid for another six months. I have paid all my dues, includingall my dues including the security deposit of $250 fromusing my savings account with City Bank. Now I would request you to cancel my membership and refund me the amount after deduction of the next three months' fees. Over the past yearNot to mention, your well-equipped club has benefited me greatlyoffered me enormous benefits so far. The wide range of sports and fitness activities has helped me get back into shaperegain my lean body shape again. The instructors have been very professionalThe instructors were very professional and with their help, I have adopted a suitable, healthy dietfound a perfect and healthy diet. The outdoor activities were phenomenal and the tennis coachlawn tennis coach taught me how to play one of my favourite sports. I regretIt is a regret that I am obligedbound to cancel my club membership from 1st December. I have recently been transferred to Edinburgh and I am left with no choice but to move there at the end of November. I would, therefore, request you to cancel my membership and refund my security deposit and any remaining balance after the deductionany fee left after the deduction. Kindly deposit it intoto the bank account number 1123456, Barclays Bank, Oxford Street, London. Thank you for your excellent serviceThanks for such a great club and I wish the club every successevery success of it. Yours sincerely,
Emma Fiona
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter gives detailed coverage of the membership, payment, benefits, and reason for leaving, and its courteous tone suits communication with the club secretary. Its effectiveness is reduced by the single-block structure and several unnatural or repetitive phrases, while the refund request could also be expressed more clearly. The best improvement would be to organise each required point into its own paragraph and state the requested refund terms precisely.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose and all required points are developed in detail, though the two descriptions of the fee deduction make the requested refund slightly unclear.
State once, in exact terms, which fees may be deducted and what remaining amount should be refunded.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas move logically through membership details, benefits, and the reason for leaving, but the body lacks paragraph breaks and some linking is forced.
Give each bullet point a separate paragraph and replace formulaic links such as 'Not to mention' with smoother progression.
Lexical Resource
The writer demonstrates a broad topic-appropriate vocabulary, although several combinations such as 'regain my lean body shape again' and 'found a perfect and healthy diet' are awkward.
Prefer precise natural collocations, for example 'regain my fitness,' 'adopt a healthy diet,' and 'credit the refund to my account.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied complex structures are generally well controlled, and the remaining errors rarely interfere with meaning.
Refine article and preposition choices and keep time references consistent when describing past and continuing benefits.
Write this task while it is fresh
Try the same task now. It helps you remember the feedback and write better next time.
IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter:
- state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this
- give details on how you have benefited from the club
- explain why you want to leave
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.