You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter: - thank the restaurant for the successful evening - mention the food, service and atmosphere - suggest improvements that could make things better

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Sample Response

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Dear Sir or Madam, I celebratedI have recently celebrated my birthday at your restaurant with my friends and it was a wonderful celebrationthat was a grand party. I am writing this letter to thank you for making it a successful and memorable event. My friends and I thoroughly enjoyed the food at your restaurant. The birthday cake was delicious and everyone liked it. Your kitchenculinary staff cooked delicious food and delighted everyone’s palateinveigled everyone’s taste. The superb menu was provided at a reasonable price. Moreover, the staff was polite and ready to attend tokeen to look after our needsrequirements. The service offered was attentiveintriguing and beyond our expectations. In additionTo add more, the restaurant reflectsdepicts Mother Nature’smother nature’s beauty with glistening greenery all around. The soothing and pleasant atmosphere made the event memorable and enjoyableunique and engaging. However, some improvements would make your restaurant more appealing, I suppose. Firstly, more staff members are needed to serveessential to serving all the guests. Furthermore, it would be great if you could include a wider range of international disheswide variety of foreign cuisines on your menu. I hope you will consider my suggestionsI trust you would accept my suggestions. I look forward to seeing the improvements in the restaurant. Once again thank you for excellent servicea praiseworthy service. Yours faithfully, Vishwa Vinutna

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter fully addresses the occasion, food, service, atmosphere, and possible improvements, while sustaining a courteous formal tone. Its strongest feature is the relevant detail supporting the writer's appreciation, but cohesion and lexical precision are weakened by a single-block structure, formulaic linking, and several misused words. The main priority is to group related points into paragraphs and replace inflated expressions with natural, exact language.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The purpose is immediately clear, every bullet point is sufficiently developed, and the appreciative formal tone suits the restaurant audience.

Next step

Make each suggested improvement more persuasive by briefly connecting it to a specific aspect of the birthday experience.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

Ideas progress logically from thanks to details and suggestions, but paragraphing is absent and some linking phrases feel mechanical.

Next step

Divide the letter into purposeful paragraphs and rely on the logical sequence rather than frequent formulaic connectors.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

There is good range for describing the event, but inaccurate choices such as inveigled everyone's taste and intriguing service reduce precision.

Next step

Use natural collocations such as appealed to everyone's taste, attentive service, and lush surroundings.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

A range of sentence forms is handled with generally good accuracy, with only occasional tense, preposition, and punctuation slips.

Next step

Review verb patterns and sentence boundaries, especially constructions such as essential for serving and introductory thank-you phrases.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter:

- thank the restaurant for the successful evening

- mention the food, service and atmosphere

- suggest improvements that could make things better

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