Some say that due to heavy traffic governments need to build more roads in metropolitan cities, while others argue this isn't the right solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Global developmentAdvancement of the world has brought tremendous development in the transportation system, but in developing and undeveloped countries, the increase in private vehicles hasincreases in private vehicles has become the main cause of traffic congestionreason of traffic blocks. Some people argue that the government should take the initiative to buildtake initiatives in building more roads to solve this problem but others arguesome others argue building roadsroad is not the right solution. However, I tend to agree with the latter statement that construction of new roads is not the only and proper solution for it. First and foremost, the government’s initiativegovernment’s initiative to buildmake new roads to reduce heavy trafficfor reducing the heavy traffic in metropolitan cities is not the way but it is a waste of government fundsthe wastage of government funds which should be used for the basic needs of societybasic purpose of the society. To be precise, building new roads instead of limiting private vehicles will havedo no effect on traffic flow. For example, a country like India has to give more priority to the basic needs of low-income society such as in healthcare, employment, education more instead of developing road system which is of least important for the development of a country. Moreover, another reasonone of the other reasons why it is not a right solution to build new roads is that it wastes land resourcesit is wastage of land resource. To be clear, construction of new roads will take away acres of land from agriculture which affect the economy of the farmers that lead to impact the revenue of that particular place. However, the argument of building new roads to reduce heavy traffic by government is mainly because of wastage of time and fuel spent in the traffic blocks but if the same traffic can be managed by endorsing new rules to limit private vehicles and encourage and improve public transport facility which can reduce heavy traffic to a larger extent. To sum up, after analysing the argument of building roads by the public sectorby public sector and the opposite view that it is not the only right solution, it is evident that if the government takesif government take initiatives to control the number of private vehicles by increasing taxes and parking charges, and also by developing the public transportation systempublic transportation system it can not only control heavy traffic but also itits will be a great help for the next generation by saving fuel, time and life from accidents.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear position against relying on new roads and offers relevant alternatives such as restricting private vehicles and improving public transport. Its main limitation is that several supporting claims are only partly convincing or become difficult to follow in overloaded sentences, with frequent language errors. Prioritise developing each reason through a precise cause-and-effect chain, using shorter sentences and more natural word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear throughout and relevant reasons and alternatives are presented, although some claims are insufficiently justified or loosely connected to congestion.
Explain exactly how each proposal would reduce traffic and support claims about public spending and land use with more convincing reasoning.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall progression from position to reasons and alternatives is clear, but absent paragraph breaks and long, crowded sentences weaken cohesion.
Give each main reason its own paragraph and split contrast, explanation, and result into separate, clearly linked sentences.
Lexical Resource
There is enough range to discuss transport policy, public spending, and land use, but frequent collocational and word-form errors reduce precision.
Use established expressions such as traffic congestion, road construction, public transport, and have little effect consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted frequently, but persistent errors with articles, agreement, clauses, and sentence boundaries sometimes strain readability.
Build shorter controlled sentences first, then check subject-verb agreement and article use before combining clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some say that due to heavy traffic governments need to build more roads in metropolitan cities, while others argue this isn't the right solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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