People’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this. Many people relate this to technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem?
Sample Response
These days, stress is getting the more serious problem that people face and the temp of the enormous rise of this issue is turning into a tremendous challenge. This essay will discuss the causes as well as examine the solutions for dealing with this issue. It is obvious that today’s modern and complicated world places far morebrings an immense amount of pressurestressful pressure on individuals than in the pastthan it was in the past. Firstly, a highly competitive work environment places greater stress on peoplestresses people in a greater way, while previously finding a job and remaining employedseeking a job and survival mechanism in the workplace was not too hard. Additionally, because the current necessity for women to go to work and, at the same time, to be a good wife as well as successfully raise children makes their lives more stressful. Moreover, women’s increasing responsibilitiesincreasing the level of women’s responsibilities puts enormous pressure on men who still need to earn an incomeneed to earn and share familythe responsibilities with women. However, there are ways to tackle such problems. The main solution could be providedintroduced by the government. For example, it can make job hunting less stressfulmake the problem of seeking a job less stressful by creating more jobsworkplaces and organising agencies to help potential employees find suitable jobsmeet their future job. Also, the government can create more social organisations that help families manage childcare responsibilitieshelp families share the responsibilities of raising children. To sum up, it is evident that the level of pressure that makes peoplepersons feel more stressed is increasingis gaining momentum. There are several causes of this pressurecauses leading to it such as difficulty finding a jobsuch as hard to find a job and the fear of losing it as well as growing family responsibilitiesgrowing responsibilities on families. In spite of that, various solutions exist to mitigate these issues.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response addresses both causes and solutions and maintains a generally clear direction, with relevant ideas about employment pressure and family responsibilities. Its main limitation is that these ideas are asserted more than fully explained, while frequent awkward phrasing and grammatical slips reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop each cause-solution link with a specific, clearly expressed explanation or example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both parts of the task are addressed with relevant causes and practical government-led solutions, though support remains somewhat general.
Extend each main cause and solution with a specific explanation or example showing how it affects stress levels.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear causes-to-solutions sequence, but paragraphing is limited and some links are mechanical or imprecise.
Separate the causes and solutions into focused paragraphs and use referencing to connect ideas more naturally.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for the topic and some less common language, but several word choices and collocations are awkward.
Prioritise accurate combinations such as finding employment, workplace pressure, and family responsibilities over imprecise ambitious wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the message, although errors in articles, clauses, comparison, and sentence formation recur.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
People’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this. Many people relate this to technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem?
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