The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on the British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. What are your views on this issue?
Sample Response
In today’s fast-moving world where cars play an important role, it is believed by a majority of people that travel by private cartransportation by private mode or private car is more convenientmore convenient and simple. Others, however, believe thatWhereas others differ in the opinion that public transport is the best option in many aspects. However, I believe that travelling by public transportvehicles is a good option for the following reasons. First, various modes of public transport are availablevarious transport modes are there and they can carry many passengers at oncethe majority of passengers at a time while using the same amount of fuel and road spacewhich consumes the same fuel and occupy the road. Private cars which carry between one and four peopleone person to four maximum consume more fuel, occupy more road space, and cause traffic problemsis a way of consuming more fuel, to block more space in the road and cause traffic problems.
On the other hand, metro transportmetro rail mode of transportation is simple and fast which is better than cars and buses. One limitation of the metroLoophole with this one is that it cannot cover all streets. This metro carries passengers from one station to another destination. Both buses and metro systems reduce pollutionanother destination both bus and metro rails reduce the pollutions compared with private carscompared to the private travelling. Alternatively, carpoolingOtherwise, carpool is the next option for transport, but the options above are more convenientbut the above all they are handier when time management is considered. Certainly, alternative forms of transportalternative transports are mandatory and citizens must be aware of this concept moreover international control should be introduced to prevent private car ownership. These actions lead us to save petrol and diesel for coming generations where it cannot be manufactured If new cars come on roads every day, it leads to traffic problem and a lot of time consumption is noticed to travel shot or near distance and hence travellers should notice and use bicycles to cover surrounding areas which burn human energy and adds health benefits. Lastly, utilisation of personal vehicles must be controlled for daily transportation simultaneously passengers should look after the public mode of travelling.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response presents a clear preference for public transport and identifies several relevant benefits of limiting private-car use. Its impact is reduced by underdeveloped discussion of international controls, loosely connected ideas, and frequent grammatical and word-choice errors that sometimes strain readability. The highest-priority improvement is to organise two distinct, fully explained reasons into separate paragraphs and edit each sentence for agreement, punctuation, and precise transport vocabulary.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear view and relevant reasons for alternative transport and ownership controls, but several ideas are only briefly asserted or unclear.
Explain how an international ownership policy would operate and support that view with one specific, fully developed example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main position can be followed, but inadequate paragraphing, long run-on sequences, and misused linking expressions weaken progression.
Divide the argument into focused paragraphs and use simple, accurate transitions to show addition, contrast, and result.
Lexical Resource
There is enough transport-related vocabulary to discuss the topic, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace awkward expressions with standard transport collocations and check plural and countable noun forms throughout.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent agreement, article, punctuation, and sentence-boundary errors sometimes hinder reading.
Write shorter complete sentences first, then check subject-verb agreement and punctuation before combining ideas into complex structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on the British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. What are your views on this issue?
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