Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
Sample Response
In today's world, competitionIn today's world competition among countries to host international sporting eventsfor hosting any international sporting event has increased. Many people believe that international sporting events cause many issues. However, I strongly disagree because such events give an opportunitybecause it gives an opportunity to all nations to come together. Firstly, organising aany sporting event requires costly equipment, proper planning, manpower, arrangement, money and preparation. For instance, to arrange one cricket match, planningfor arranging one cricket match panning, a stadium, a schedule, and other preparationsa stadium, schedule and other preparation are required. People also purchase costly tickets to watch the matchtickets for watching the match. People who travel around the world to watchtravel around the world for watching those matches require accommodation arrangementsarrangement. This may cause unnecessaryunwanted expenses for countries that hostcountries who can host sporting events. However, we cannot deny the importance of sports in our liveslife. Any international sporting event such as the Olympic Gamesevent like Olympic Games gives an opportunity to all participants to perform at their bestperform their best and setmake records. Sports lovers around the world would definitely getdefinitely would get the best entertainment because of such events. Nowadays, films and television serialsNowadays films, television serials are entertaining and popular among people. Likewise, sports are also equally important, entertaining and popular. From this, it becomes quite evident that such events encouragesuch kind of events encourages young people in sports activities. Furthermore, it gives an opportunity to all nations around the world to come together. For instance, in the football World Cupin football world cup most of the countries can participate, which is very good for maintaining peace as well as maintaining good international relationshipsgood international relationship globally. This helps them to come closer to each other. This shows why sporting events have vast importance. In conclusion, although arranging a sports event is expensive and causes some issues, it has a vast importance at the global level. For any sportsperson, it gives a chance not only to perform but also to entertain. Thus disadvantages of sporting events outweigh the advantages, and I believe that there are too many benefits because of such events.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response discusses costs as a drawback and develops several benefits, particularly entertainment, youth participation, and international cooperation. However, the conclusion directly contradicts the earlier position by saying that disadvantages outweigh advantages before again claiming there are many benefits, leaving the final opinion unclear; the one-paragraph presentation also weakens organisation. Prioritise stating one consistent judgement and structuring separate paragraphs for hosting costs and the strongest national benefits.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views receive relevant discussion, but development is uneven and the contradictory final judgement prevents a clear, consistent opinion.
Decide whether benefits or problems are greater and express that same position unambiguously in both the introduction and conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a basic progression from costs to benefits and conclusion, but the single paragraph, repetition, and final contradiction disrupt overall coherence.
Create separate introduction, drawback, benefit, and conclusion paragraphs, with each paragraph advancing one clear stage of the argument.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for sporting events and international relations, but repetition and frequent inaccurate or unnatural combinations reduce precision.
Use precise phrases such as hosting costs, infrastructure investment, accommodation demand, inspire youth participation, and strengthen international relations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of structures is attempted, but recurring errors in articles, agreement, relative clauses, infinitives, and sentence construction reduce control.
Check subject-verb agreement and article use, particularly in sentences about events, countries, participants, and international relationships.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
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