Some people think that excessive use of mobile phones and computers badly affects teenagers' writing and reading skills. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give your opinion.
Sample Response
It is true that the heavy use of computers and cell phones would have a negative impact on young people. However, I am not totally convinced that it would necessarily hinder the development of their writing and reading skillsdeter their writing and reading skills. On the one handOn one hand, relying too much on computers and mobile phones would effect on teenagers not to become proficient in some basic skills. Since computers and mobile phones come with a word processor with a spellcheckeraccompanied with spellchecker, teenagers' handwritingteenager's handwriting will probably suffer. For instance, young people who excessively depend on computers or mobile phones may not be able to write a letter by hand. In addition, reading on computers and mobile phones does not encouragereading through computers and mobile phones do not encourage teenagers to read long stories or lengthy research bookshigh volume research books. They do not develop a reading habit that enables them to broaden their knowledge. Furthermore, readingFurthermore reading long passages through these devices could be very harmful to their eyesighteyes. On the other hand, I believe that for severalsome reasons, computers and cell phones would benefit young people's reading and writing abilities. Firstly, reading on computers and cell phones engagesreading through computers and cell phones engage young people in learning and acquiringgrasping knowledge. The ease of access to informationaccess to the information makes reading more interesting. For example, many of us stop reading a certain book because its introduction put him or her off continuing. While by surfing the Internet we can find the information that we interested on without a need to read the whole book. Secondly, using computers and mobile phones improvesimprove some writing skills, which are useful in future jobs such as using word processors to create reportssuch as word processors for making reports, presentation softwarepower point program, taking notes on a phonemaking notes in telephone or even learninglearn the meaning or the spelling of a word that we have never come across. In conclusion, it seems to me that depending too much on computers and cell phones would bring both benefits and drawbacks.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response considers both harmful and beneficial effects of heavy device use and supports its discussion with concrete examples. Its main weakness is that the qualified position is not expressed precisely enough, while a few points, such as eye damage, drift from reading and writing skills and recurring language errors weaken clarity. The priority is to state the exact extent of agreement and keep every example focused on literacy outcomes.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both sides are addressed with relevant support and a qualified position, but the final judgment remains broad and some material is tangential.
State exactly how far you disagree and link every supporting point directly to changes in teenagers' reading or writing ability.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear two-sided progression and uses signposting effectively, although the single-block presentation and some long sequences weaken organization.
Use distinct paragraphs for the introduction, each side, and the conclusion, with one central idea developed in each body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for education and technology, but several collocations and prepositions are inaccurate or unnatural.
Replace awkward combinations with precise phrasing and check verb-preposition patterns, especially when describing effects, access, and interest.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex sentences and remains generally clear, but agreement, pronoun, article, and clause errors occur repeatedly.
Proofread complex sentences for subject-verb agreement and complete dependent clauses, then simplify any structure that cannot be controlled accurately.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that excessive use of mobile phones and computers badly affects teenagers' writing and reading skills. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give your opinion.
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