Many people believe that inherent talent is more important than practice in many fields like sport or music. According to them great musicians and sportsmen are born and can’t be created. However, others claim that talent has little to do with success and any child can be taught to become a great sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Throughout human historyThroughout the enormous capacity of human history, we have come acrosswe came across countless people with extraordinary talents in art, music, sport, science and so on. However, amongof all these experts, some are borninnate with a precious gift while others acquired their abilities through trainingothers were acquired, trained when they were children. Nevertheless, success is often combined with many factors including environmental factorsenvironments, the extent of practice, training methods, and indubitably, a certain level of talenttalents. Therefore, I believe that innate talent mattersbelieve in congenital talents, which, to say the least, are an essential element of successthe essential element to success. Mozart, an exceptional musician, showed his superb musicalmusic talent when he was only three and was able to complete an exquisite symphony by the time he turned sixas he turned six. Susan Boyle, an ordinary middle-aged woman who never received any professional training as an opera singer, was able to earn a deafening standing ovation from the entire audiencewhole podium by singing "I had a dream", a song which would require a professional singer to show complete emotional commitmentpour their genuine devotion in order to reach perfection. Genetic researchA genetic research indicated that up to 50% of the great artists we came to recognise were born with exceptional talentsupreme talents. These prodigies are sometimes so unfairly gifted that they will leave a ghastly gap between those who were trained to be professional and were not supposed to be outrun single-handedly. Nevertheless, people still claimclaimed that anyone can be trained to become a professional. Jeremy Lin, a rising NBA basketball player who created "Linsanity", seizedhad grabbed the opportunity to succeedthe sheer opportunity to success by polishing his skills and training ever since he was a child and dedicated himself to basketballcommitted his dedication in basketball no matter what difficulties that lay aheaddifficulty that lied ahead. Yo Yo Ma, a phenomenal musician, started his cellocellist training when he was only four and devoted himself fully to itimmersed his whole dedication into it throughout his life. These people's success is not instantaneous. Their paths to glory were established through hard work, accompanied by consistent training and still, a certain degree of innate talents. To put into conclusion, the genetic privilege could not be fooled. Whether acquired or congenital, people will always need some talent to help them reach from good to great.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its clear position, supported by relevant examples for both the talent and practice perspectives. Its main limitation is that ambitious vocabulary and complex sentences are often handled imprecisely, while the lack of paragraph breaks weakens the presentation of an otherwise logical argument. The highest priority is to organise the two views into distinct paragraphs and use more natural, accurately controlled phrasing when explaining each example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed with a clear opinion and several relevant examples, although some support relies more on assertion than analysis.
Explain more explicitly how each example proves the relative importance of talent or sustained practice.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a recognisable progression, but presenting the entire response as one block obscures the separation between the two views.
Use distinct introduction, viewpoint, and conclusion paragraphs with clearer internal topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
A broad and ambitious vocabulary conveys the argument, though frequent unnatural collocations and imprecise word choices reduce accuracy.
Prefer natural combinations such as innate talent and dedication to training, and check that formal words fit their exact context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures, but recurring problems with agreement, tense, articles, and clause construction weaken control.
Edit complex sentences for consistent tense and complete grammatical relationships before adding further elaboration.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people believe that inherent talent is more important than practice in many fields like sport or music. According to them great musicians and sportsmen are born and can’t be created. However, others claim that talent has little to do with success and any child can be taught to become a great sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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