No matter how few possessions you own or how little money you have, loving wildlife and nature will make you rich beyond measure. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
In recent yearsOver the recent years, thea presence of nature in the average citizen’s lifein average citizen’s life has significantly decreased. The essay bellow will analyze whether this fact affects both on human wellness and well-being. Firstly, thea meditative effect of nature helps people rechargetakes a lot out of people. Concentrating on a breeze, sound of fallen leaves and birds’ songs really helps people relax and feel refreshedmakes everyone loosen and perk up. MoreoverEven more, spending time in naturein the nature for relaxationwith a relaxing outcome is called ecotherapy in psychology. Thus, being in a natural environmentaround natural habitat is a mentallymental uplifting activity. However, someone is capable of truly enjoying the beauty of nature: some people live in such an environment where the trees are chopped down or where an illegal dumping problem exists. Secondly, exercise in fresh, clean aira work-out on a fresh clean air strengthens people physicallybuilds people up. Moreover, it helps people feel tiredhelps to feel knocked out in the evening which is essential to get good-quality sleepa proper quality of sleep at night. According to the recent researches, strengthening effect of the nature is proven by positive considerable changes in blood pressure, muscle endurance and overall immune system kicking in. Hence, nature is the only powerful forceobjectively only intense power that keeps us alive. Nevertheless, it is impossible to spend all one’s free time in naturegive all one’s free time to the nature due to the various unpleasant occurrences of bad weather conditions. To conclude, not only does nature enhancedoes the nature enhances physical health, but it also improves emotional state. What modern society needs is to reassess its relationshipWhat modern society need is reassessing relationships with the biological world – it will benefit us all indeed.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response's clearest strength is its relevant explanation of mental and physical benefits gained from spending time in nature. However, it only indirectly addresses the claim that nature creates richness despite limited money or possessions, and frequent awkward word choices and grammatical errors weaken clarity; the priority is to frame each main point around that central contrast and support it with accurate, controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives relevant benefits of nature and a generally positive viewpoint, but it only partially engages with the claim about wealth, possessions, and money.
Connect each health or emotional benefit explicitly to why nature can make a person feel rich without material wealth.
Coherence and Cohesion
The mental and physical benefits follow a recognizable sequence, but the single-block presentation and mechanical linking weaken progression.
Use separate paragraphs for the central view, mental benefits, physical benefits, and the final opinion.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts varied vocabulary about health and nature, but frequent inaccurate collocations sometimes distort the intended meaning.
Prefer familiar, precise combinations and check phrases such as 'takes a lot out of people' against their intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex forms is attempted, but recurring errors with articles, agreement, prepositions, and clause structure reduce control.
Proofread each sentence for one complete clause pattern, then correct articles and subject-verb agreement before adding complexity.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
No matter how few possessions you own or how little money you have, loving wildlife and nature will make you rich beyond measure. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.
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