The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The chart provides a visual representation of the residents' coffee and tea purchasing and consumption habitscoffee and tea purchasing habits in five Australian cities, namely Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart.namely Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.
Overall, going to a cafe for coffee or tea was the most popular habit in all cities except Adelaideacross almost all cities, while purchasing fresh coffee consistently had the lowest popularityuptake.
Melbourne had the highest percentage of people who went to a cafe for coffee or tea, at nearly 64%. This was followed by Hobart with roughly 63% and Sydney with approximately 61%. Brisbane and Adelaide reported the lowest figures, at roughly 55% and around 49%just under 50% respectively.
Regarding instant coffee purchases,As for those who bought instant coffee, Hobart led with nearly 55%, closely followed by Brisbane at 53%, whereas Adelaide and Sydney recorded 50% and just over 45%, with Melbourne at about 48%.recorded 50% and 45% respectively.
Turning to fresh coffee, the lowest percentage of residentscitizens spent their money on fresh coffee in the last 4 weeks. Sydney and Melbourne recorded the highest proportions at nearly 44% and 43% respectively, followed by Hobart at roughly 38%. Lastly, Brisbane and Adelaide reported similar proportionsthe similar proportions of just under 35%.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The report effectively summarizes the visual data with clear key feature comparisons and an accurate overview. Minor omissions, such as omitting Melbourne's instant coffee figure in the detailed analysis, slightly reduce the completeness of the description. Ensuring all specific data points mentioned in key groups are fully accounted for will elevate the performance further.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and accurately reports the vast majority of key data across the categories.
Ensure all relevant data points for every category, such as instant coffee consumption in Melbourne, are explicitly included.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organized by habit, allowing for smooth progression and clear comparison between cities.
Maintain this effective paragraph structure while ensuring all transitioning phrases link smoothly between detailed points.
Lexical Resource
A wide range of task-appropriate vocabulary is used naturally and precisely to describe trends and percentages.
Continue utilizing varied lexical choices while avoiding slight article inaccuracies like 'the similar proportions'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammatical structures are varied and consistently accurate throughout the entire response.
Refine minor article usages to ensure complete grammatical perfection across all complex structures.