Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information?
Sample Response
“Books are the best teachers”. This line still holds the truth in current era but with some changes in the way we access the books. With the advancement of technology, internet and computers have become the main source of information and have put in front a very important question. Whether computer and the internet will totally replace books as the form of information?
From my point of view, it already has replaced books thanks to the benefits it poses over the traditional hand written text. Computers in the form of tablet and phones are more portable and carry loads of information which on paper requires humungous size. Data on computers also gets updated with the help of internet which in the case of books can be done only by purchasing new ones. Live instances of this can be found around easily. To illustrate, in schools more emphasis now being put on teaching via computer and internet which is more interactive for students and also does not require them to carry heavy books and notes. Also devices like kindle which is an e-book reader helps people to read for long hours without straining eyes and to carry unlimited number of books at the same point of time which in the case of traditional textbooks required behemoth effort. Again, all the renowned publishers all around the world now release the soft copy of their books, magazines and other publications that show the dominance of e-version of print media. The day is not far when people will carry technological device instead of carrying a large number of books with them.
To conclude, technology has already replaced traditional books and there is nothing wrong in this as technology is an ever changing concept which meant to help us.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Article and collocation Original: holds the truth in current era Suggested revision: still holds true in the current era Why it matters: Hold true is the idiomatic expression and era needs an article.
- 2. Missing article Original: internet and computers Suggested revision: the internet and computers Why it matters: Internet normally takes the definite article.
- 3. Wrong collocation Original: have put in front a very important question Suggested revision: have raised an important question Why it matters: Raise a question is the natural phrase.
- 4. Sentence fragment Original: Whether computer and the internet will totally replace books as the form of information? Suggested revision: The question is whether computers and the internet will completely replace books as sources of information. Why it matters: Whether cannot introduce a standalone direct question in this form.
- 5. Agreement Original: it already has replaced books Suggested revision: they have already replaced books Why it matters: The compound subject technology and computers requires a plural reference.
- 6. Wrong verb Original: benefits it poses over Suggested revision: advantages it offers over Why it matters: Offer advantages is the correct collocation.
- 7. Plural nouns Original: tablet and phones Suggested revision: tablets and phones Why it matters: Both count nouns refer to devices generally.
- 8. Academic precision Original: requires humungous size Suggested revision: would require a large volume of paper Why it matters: The original is informal and grammatically awkward.
- 9. Missing auxiliary Original: more emphasis now being put Suggested revision: more emphasis is now being placed Why it matters: The passive construction requires is.
- 10. Agreement and name Original: devices like kindle which is an e-book reader helps Suggested revision: devices such as the Kindle, an e-book reader, help Why it matters: The plural subject takes help and Kindle is a proper name.
- 11. Concise phrase Original: at the same point of time Suggested revision: at the same time Why it matters: This is the idiomatic expression.
- 12. Wrong collocation Original: required behemoth effort Suggested revision: would require considerable effort Why it matters: Behemoth does not naturally modify effort.
Suggested Rewrites
- holds the truth in current era still holds true in the current era
- internet and computers the internet and computers
- have put in front a very important question have raised an important question
- Whether computer and the internet will totally replace books as the form of information? The question is whether computers and the internet will completely replace books as sources of information.
- it already has replaced books they have already replaced books
- benefits it poses over advantages it offers over
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay presents a clear position and supports it with relevant points about portability, updating information, education, e-readers, and digital publishing. Development is somewhat one-sided and assertions about complete replacement are not tested against the continuing value of print, while frequent article, agreement, and sentence-structure errors reduce control. Add a considered counterargument and edit each complex sentence for grammatical completeness.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
A clear answer is sustained with several relevant examples, but the absolute claim is insufficiently qualified.
Acknowledge why printed books may persist, then explain why digital sources will nevertheless dominate.
Coherence and Cohesion
The central argument is easy to follow, but one very long body paragraph and some mechanical linking weaken progression.
Divide the body into portability/access and education/publishing, with a focused topic sentence for each.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate range, but informal exaggeration and inaccurate collocations are frequent.
Replace words such as humungous and behemoth with precise academic descriptions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is usually clear, but articles, agreement, fragments, and complex-clause control show frequent errors.
Check every subject-verb pair and add missing articles and auxiliary verbs.