Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information?
Sample Response
Undoubtedly, through the last few years, there is a revolutionary progress in technology while the use of computers is getting more and more spread. the internet gets an important role in everyday life by easing the communication between people and countries. As a result, the news spread rapidly throughout the world defeating the borders of distance. For instance, an airplane crushed in Asia is getting known in minutes from people all over the world. Getting information from the internet is not only fast but cost effective as well. For more internet sites it is not necessary to get a subscription to be able to use their services, but even if it required the alternatives are countless.
On the other hand, books exist for hundreds of years and in my opinion, they are not going to be completely replaced anytime soon. Although the information delivered by them could be anachronistic, there is a certain validation of their content which couldn't be guaranteed by internet sites. Books like encyclopaedia are comprehensive and accessible anytime. Moreover, the cost of a book is generally lower than this of a computer, so it's ideal for less privileged people. For thousands of years, books and written words were the main source of knowledge and it will continue next few hundred years.
To conclude, from my point of view both technology and traditional books are required for getting full information. Books are more suitable for the fundamental knowledge and internet for the most recent one. Although computers and the internet are getting more and more popular, books are going to keep expanding our knowledge for years to come.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Clearer wording Original: through the last few years Suggested revision: over the last few years Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 2. Grammar fix Original: there is a revolutionary progress Suggested revision: there has been revolutionary progress Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 3. Clearer wording Original: getting more and more spread Suggested revision: becoming increasingly widespread Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 4. Clearer wording Original: the internet gets an important role Suggested revision: the internet plays an important role Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 5. Clearer wording Original: easing the communication Suggested revision: making communication easier Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 6. Grammar fix Original: the news spread rapidly Suggested revision: news spreads rapidly Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 7. Clearer wording Original: defeating the borders of distance Suggested revision: overcoming geographical distance Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 8. Clearer wording Original: an airplane crushed Suggested revision: an aeroplane crashed Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 9. Clearer wording Original: is getting known in minutes from people Suggested revision: becomes known to people within minutes Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 10. Grammar fix Original: For more internet sites Suggested revision: On most websites Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 11. Clearer wording Original: even if it required Suggested revision: even if one is required Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 12. Clearer wording Original: books exist for hundreds of years Suggested revision: books have existed for hundreds of years Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
Suggested Rewrites
- through the last few years over the last few years
- there is a revolutionary progress there has been revolutionary progress
- getting more and more spread becoming increasingly widespread
- the internet gets an important role the internet plays an important role
- easing the communication making communication easier
- the news spread rapidly news spreads rapidly
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay presents a clear view that digital sources and books will coexist, and it organises benefits and limitations into a recognisable discussion. Development is fairly general, however, and frequent collocation, agreement and tense errors make the argument sound less precise; the highest-priority improvement is to build each reason through a clear claim-and-example chain while proofreading verb forms and natural academic word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
The task is addressed with relevant content, but key details or reasoning need fuller precision.
Develop the main features or claims with exact, verifiable support.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear overall structure, though local progression can be more precise.
Use explicit, economical sequencing and remove repetition.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient for the task, but several collocations or word choices are inaccurate.
Replace awkward combinations with standard academic or task-specific phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of forms is attempted, but recurring grammar errors reduce accuracy.
Proofread agreement, articles, prepositions and clause structure.