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People in many countries spend more and more time far away from their families. Why does this happen and what effects will it have on them and their families?

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    In recent years, many people around the world are spending increasing amounts of time away from their families. This trend can be attributed mainly to career advancement and educational opportunities in other cities or countries.

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    The increasing amount of time people spend away from their families in many countries is largely influenced by socioeconomic demands and technological advancements. This modern phenomenon, while offering certain benefits, also brings a range of emotional and social consequences.

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