All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement. Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some people suppose that all university students should go abroad to study or to do a work placement for a period during their degree programmesfor a duration in their undergraduate studies; inIn my view, the advantages of this approachadvantages of this manner are outweighed by the disadvantages.

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Studying or interning overseas has a few advantages for students and universities. Such programmes provide students with opportunities to live and interact in other countriescommunicate in other countries, which allows them to broaden their horizons and gain insights into different cultures and work environments. When interacting with diverse groups of peers from around the world, exchange students can practise their social skills and gainskills, and gain an understanding of the educational environments of various countries. Additionally, participating universities gain more opportunitiesa variety of universities have more chances to communicate with each other, and it’s easier to get to know the their partner institutions' pedagogical philosophiescounterpart's theory of education. They may also establish links with foreign institutions, which could improve their international reputation and teaching approaches.

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On the other hand, this policy also creates significant difficulties. Firstly, the funding is worth considering carefully. If the accommodation, travel, and extra course fees are borne by the individuals, many students who come from low-income families may be unable to afford them, which means they will give up the valuable chance due to exorbitant expenses, makingwhereas it makes the policy unfair rather than beneficial. However, if the university bears these costsbears it, it is a huge cost as well. From an academic perspective, some disciplines are not suited tosome are not suited to an extended period away. Students majoring in engineering or medicine, for instance, practical training is closely linked to the core university courses, which means an internship will interrupt studies, delay graduation and create unnecessary administrative problems. In addition, if a placement is poorly organised, it may interrupt academic study or involve routine work rather than genuine training. Consequently, students may suffer from constant stress and emotional strain instead of thriving in an enriching environment.

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Ultimately, the disadvantages of this educational arrangement would outweigh the advantages from my perspective. I do not believe this is an effectivebelieve this a remarkable way to help students’ future development.

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Why this response received Band 7.0

文章清晰地回应了题目要求,明确表达了弊大于利的立场,并从经济负担和学术干扰等角度展开了充分的论证。全文结构连贯,词汇表达较丰富,能够熟练运用多种复合句。建议进一步提高复杂句型的准确度,并更精准地针对题目中的论点细节展开对比。

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IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

任务回应

7.0
Scoring rule

文章全面回应了写作任务,立场明确,且对正反两方面的观点均进行了较充分的论述。

Next step

可以更精准地区分海外留学与本地工作实习的不同影响,使论据更加紧扣题目中的选择条件。

CC

连贯与衔接

7.0
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文章段落划分合理,逻辑推进清晰,衔接词的使用整体自然顺畅。

Next step

在段落内部推导观点时,可进一步优化句际衔接,使逻辑链条更加紧密。

LR

词汇资源

7.0
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使用了较丰富的学术与教育类词汇,能够自然地表达复杂观点。

Next step

注意个别词汇搭配与语境的契合度,尽量避免较为生硬或不地道的表达。

GRA

语法多样性与准确性

7.0
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展现了良好的句式多样性,大部分句子语法正确,不影响意思理解。

Next step

注意复杂句式的结构完整性,避免出现句式杂糅或主语破折导致的语法瑕疵。