The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
Sample Response
The given line graph and table givesgive data on the number of foreign travellers who visited Australia from the year 1975 to 2005 and showshows where they came from. As is observed from the given illustrations, the number of overseas visitors increased steadily across the periodincreased steadily each year and the highest number of tourists came to Australia from Japan and South Korea. As is presented in the given line graph, around 9 million tourists came to Australia initially in 1975. This number kept on increasing steadily and reached over 15 million in 1985. In the year the number of tourists who visited Australia reached 24 millionreached to 24 million and in 1995, before reaching its final value in 2005finally in 1995, this number roserocketed to well over 30 million. The number increased each year starting from 1975 and in 30 years, the total number of touriststourists’ number got well over 30 million. The table then compares the foreign tourists who visited Australia in 1975 and 2005 and shows the origins of these tourists. In 1975, a total of 8.8 milliontotal 8.8 millions of tourists visited Australia and among them, 2.9 million came from South Korea and 3.2 million from Japan. The remaining travellers came from China, USA, Britain and Europe. After 30 years in 2005, the total tourists visiting AustraliaAustralia visiting tourists increased to 30.4 million compared to the 8.8 million 30 years earlierin 30 years back. 9.1 millionmillions of South Korean tourists came to visit Australia in 2005 and this number is more than three times themore than 3 times compared to tourists number of 1975. In 2005 the Japanese tourists’ number increased to almost four timesalmost four times than the tourists’ number of 1975. The tourists’ number increased in all six countries shownincreased for all the given six countries in 2005 than the tourists of 1975. The majority of the tourists came to visit Australia from Asia rather than fromfrom Asia than the USA and Europe. In 2005, around 22 millions of tourists came to Australia from Asian countries compared to the remaining 8.5 millions of tourists from Britain, the USA and Europe.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response identifies the sustained rise in total visits and correctly highlights Japan and South Korea as the largest sources, while using a clear overview-to-detail structure. Its main weakness is imprecise chronology and several awkward or inaccurate comparisons; the priority is to report each year and figure unambiguously, then express country changes with accurate comparative language.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
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