The table below shows the percentage of journey by different means in 4 countries and the bar graph shows the reasons for Canadian people to use a car to reach their workplace.
Sample Response
The table compares the modes of transporttypes of transports used in four countries – Canada, Belgium, Germany and Netherlands while the bar graph presents data on whypresents data why Canadians prefer privatepersonal cars to commute to workreach their offices. Turning to the detailsGetting back to the details, cars are the most preferred mode of transporttransportations in all the four given countries and the percentages of journeys made by residentstours made by citizens in these countries by cars ranged from 47% in the Netherlands to 90% in Canadaranged from 47 in Netherlands and 90 in Canada. In the NetherlandsIn Netherlands, a high proportion of trips are made by bicycle, more than one-fourth, and on foot, 18%. The highest percentage of public transport is used in Germanyused by German and which comprisesthat comprise 18% of their total journey. The bar chart, on the other hand, explains why Canadians prefer cars to commute to their office. Interestingly, the majority of Canadiansmajority of the Canadians (38%) use cars to travel to workreach offices since they do not have any alternative. A sizable percentage said using cars is more convenient (2212%). Other factors listed seem more closely relatedfactors listed seems like more related to people’s need than preference such as working a night shiftas working at night shift and work related needs.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the dominant use of cars across all four countries and selects several relevant figures from both visuals. However, it gives an incorrect value for convenience, omits most of the bar-chart figures and several useful cross-country comparisons, and presents everything in one paragraph with frequent awkward collocations and agreement errors. Prioritise a clearer overview, fuller and fully accurate data coverage, and more controlled sentence construction.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the main table trend that cars are the most common mode in every country and accurately reports several figures, including the Canadian and Dutch car shares, Dutch active travel, German public transport, and the leading Canadian reason. However, the overview does not cover the main pattern in the reasons chart, the convenience figure is incorrectly reported as 12% rather than 22%, and most remaining reasons and several useful country comparisons are omitted.
State one overview sentence for each visual, then report all five Canadian reasons accurately and add selective comparisons showing how Belgium and Germany differ from Canada and the Netherlands.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information moves from the table to the bar chart in a generally understandable order, and basic linking helps the reader follow the shift. Nevertheless, the entire report is one paragraph, the opening of the detail section is mechanical, and some long sentences carry too many ideas without clear internal control.
Use four purposeful paragraphs: introduction, overview, table details, and reasons-chart details; group related figures within each detail paragraph and use direct comparison language.
Lexical Resource
There is enough range to describe preferences, proportions, commuting, and causes, but several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, including “types of transports,” “tours,” and “mode of transportations.” These problems are noticeable but usually do not prevent understanding.
Use standard Task 1 combinations such as “modes of transport,” “journeys made,” “commute to work,” and “the proportion of respondents,” while avoiding inflated alternatives that change the meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures, and its meaning remains mostly clear. Regular errors occur with articles, agreement, relative clauses, nationality forms, and comparison structures, especially in “used by German and that comprise” and the final sentence.
Check each sentence for subject–verb agreement and articles, and build numerical comparisons with controlled forms such as “ranged from X to Y” and “was used by X%.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the percentage of journey by different means in 4 countries and the bar graph shows the reasons for Canadian people to use a car to reach their workplace.
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