The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
Sample Response
The bar graph compares visitor numbers at three museumsmuseum visitors to three different types of museums in London from 2007 to 2012. As shownAs is presented in the graph, the National Gallery became more populargot higher popularity over time and the highest number of people visited the three museums collectivelythose museums in 2012. In 2007,According to the diagram, initially in 2007, about 12 millionmore than 12 million people visited the British Museum while this number was more than 13 million for the Victoria and Albert Museumfor Victoria and Albert Museum and only 6.5 million for the National Gallery. Visitor numbers at the Victoria and Albert MuseumThe popularity of Victoria and Albert museum remainedremain almost the same next year while it declined for the other two museumsother two museums. The National Gallery Museum attracted more visitorsgot a higher number of visitors each year while the total number of visitors decreased in 2009, 2010 and in 2011. Finally, in 2012, the National Gallery attracted the largest segment of visitors, exceeding 15 millionamounting over 15 million, while the British Museum was visited by roughly 13 million people. Victoria and Albert Museum attracted 10 million visitorswas attended by 10 million guests at that time. In summary, National Gallery gained popularity over timeover the time and more people visited the London Museums in 2007 and in 2012 than they did in the years in between.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response clearly communicates the National Gallery's strong rise and provides useful comparisons for the beginning and end of the period. Its main limitation is that coverage of the intervening years is thin and the claim that total attendance decreased in 2009, 2010 and 2011 is not supported by the chart. The priority is to compare the museums' contrasting mid-period patterns accurately.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report includes a relevant overview and accurate endpoint comparisons, but it omits several important fluctuations and contains an inaccurate statement about total attendance.
Describe the British Museum's fall and recovery and the Victoria and Albert Museum's overall decline, avoiding unsupported aggregation of the yearly totals.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a generally clear chronological path, but the entire report forms one paragraph and some relationships between trends are compressed or unclear.
Separate the overview from two detail paragraphs, grouping the National Gallery's rise against the changing patterns of the other two museums.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of vocabulary for trends and comparisons, though repeated use of popularity and awkward phrases reduce precision.
Use precise chart language such as visitor numbers rose, remained stable, fell sharply, and recovered instead of got higher popularity or was attended by.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex sentences, but subject-verb agreement, articles, prepositions, and comparative structures contain recurring errors.
Check agreement and article use carefully, for example the museum's popularity remained and the other two museums.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
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