The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
Sample Response
The illustration depicts the number of visitors toin three London museums namelynamely - National Gallery, Victoria and Albert Museum and British Museum, over six yearsover half of a decade, between 2007 and 2012. It is apparent that a higher number of people visited the Victoria and Albert Museum in 2007 but by 2012 the National Galleryin 2012 the National Museum became the most visited museummost attended Museum. As is presented, about 12, 13.5 and 6 million12.5, 14 and 6 million visitors enjoyed the British, Victoria and Albert and National Gallery museums respectivelyconsequently in 2007. The number of visitorsspectators' number in the Victoria and Albert Museum remained almost the same next year but the visitors to the British Museumfans of British Museum fell sharplyplunged remarkably. By contrastOn the contrary, the number of people who visited the National Gallerypreferred to visit the National Museum generally increasedkept on growing steadily. This growth for the National Gallery continued each year and it became the most attended museum in 2012 with about 16 million visitorsaround 17 million visitants. The visitorspectator’s numbers for the Victoria and Albert Museum oscillated during these years and after a huge fall in 2010, the number of its visitors rose steadilyswelled up monotonously and reached 10 millionreached to 10 million in the final year. The trend in visitor numberstrend of the visitors in the British Museum was somewhat similar to the Victoria and Albert museum’s visitors which ended being the second most popular museum in 2012 with around 14 million guests.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response provides a clear overview and tracks the major changes for all three museums with well-chosen start and end figures. Its main weakness is precision: the National Gallery is repeatedly misnamed and its rise is described as continuous despite a plateau, while several visitor-related word choices sound unnatural. Prioritise exact labels and trend descriptions, then replace forced synonyms with standard chart-reporting vocabulary.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and supporting figures capture the principal rankings and fluctuations, with only minor naming and trend inaccuracies.
Use 'National Gallery' consistently and acknowledge that its visitor total levelled off between 2010 and 2011.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses clearly from initial values to each museum's development and final ranking, despite being presented in one block.
Divide the overview from the detailed trends and group related year-to-year movements within a dedicated body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
There is a wide range of trend vocabulary, but forced synonyms such as 'fans', 'visitants', and 'swelled up monotonously' reduce precision.
Prefer natural terms such as 'visitors', 'rose steadily', 'fluctuated', and 'reached' instead of repeatedly varying the noun.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are generally controlled and meaning remains clear, although some possessive, prepositional, and relative-clause errors occur.
Refine noun phrases and clause reference, using forms such as 'visitor numbers', 'reached 10 million', and an unambiguous final relative clause.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
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