The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
Sample Response
The given line graph illustrates the annual visits to Australia by overseas residents, in millionsby foreigners in million from the year 1975 to 2005 while the table represents these visits from six different regionscountries in both 1975 and 2005. A substantialstaggering increase in the number of visits to Australia is noticeable. most of the increaseA large portion of this increase can be attributed to visitors from South Korea and JapanSouth Koreans and Japanese tourists as shownas is evident in the table data. An upward trendAn upward moving trend is clearly visible in the line graph that shows an increase in visits to Australia by foreigners as the number rose from 8.8 million in 1975 to 30.42 million in 2005, almost trebling in value in the period spanning from 1975 to 20052000. This overall increaseThis spike in numbers can be largely attributed to South Koreans and Japanese tourists as their tourism rose by a combined 15 milliona whopping 15 million collectively. This trend was not seen in the United States, China, or Britain as the numbers of their residents visiting Australiatheir tourists' numbers who visited Australia increased by smaller amountsdid not increase significantly (1.1, 0.8 and 2.9 respectively in 2005). European tourism, alsohowever, also saw a rise in visits to Australiaa rise in appetite towards Australia their tourism rose from 1.1 million to 4.5 millionalmost quadrupled from 1975 to 2005.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response provides a clear overview of the strong upward trend and correctly identifies South Korea and Japan as the main contributors. Its main weakness is precision: the 2005 total and period of near-trebling are misstated, several country changes are not quantified, and the final sentence is grammatically fused. Prioritise exact visual data, fuller comparisons, and neutral academic wording.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and the main contributors are identified, but some figures are inaccurate and several table comparisons are underdeveloped.
Use the visual values exactly and compare each country's 1975 and 2005 figures, especially Europe and Britain.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from overview to graph and table detail, though the whole report is presented as one dense paragraph.
Separate the overview from two detail paragraphs and make each comparison lead naturally to the next.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally clear, but dramatic or awkward choices reduce academic precision.
Prefer neutral chart language such as rose, accounted for, and increased nearly fourfold.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted successfully, but article, agreement, and run-on errors remain noticeable.
Check noun forms and sentence boundaries, particularly in the final comparison.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
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