The line graphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.
Sample Response
The first line graph presents a comparative analysis of the demand for steelmarket requirement for steel and production of this material in 2010 in the UK. The second graph shows the total number of workers employed in this industry in the same year. Overall, the steel production in the UK in 2010 exceeded demandsur-plused the demand, except in Decemberexcept at the end of the year. The production of steel exceeded demand for most of the yearthroughout the time exceeded the demand. In the first quarter of the year, the actual demand for steelactual market call for steel started at 2000 million tonnes in January, but production was twice as highproduction was two times with a continuous rise. By FebruaryLater somewhere in April, the demand started reducing, but production had fallen to about 3,800 million tonnesproduction was soaring and reached 5000 million tonnes. Moreover, demand showed further fluctuations until Novemberapproximately till November and fell to almost zero whereas production of the steel reached a plateauattained plateau for some time with further variations and started falling later. After that, in December the demand was nearly roughly twice the production figuredouble than the production. From the second graph, it is evident that the total number of workers in the steel industry in the UK was 5,000 workers in January5000,000 in January and the figure rose in Februaryit rose for a month or so. But it then showed a sudden plunge and fell to about 3,000 by Marchreached 3000,000 by April, with further fluctuations in the workforcefluctuations in number till August. However, the number of workers continued to fall and reached 1000,000 by the end of the year.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the broad surplus in steel production and the overall fall in employment, and it includes figures from both visuals. However, the overview contradicts itself and several dates, movements, and units are inaccurate or imprecise. Prioritise a single accurate overview, then organise the detail chronologically with carefully checked monthly values and correct thousand/million units.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Both graphs are addressed and some major trends are recognised, but the overview is internally inconsistent and several key figures and timings do not match the visuals.
State two accurate overview features, then verify every reported month, direction, and unit against the graphs before adding detail.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report has an introduction, overview language, and a generally chronological path, but it is written as one dense paragraph and some references and transitions obscure the sequence.
Use four paragraphs: introduction, overview, steel details, and workforce details, with precise time references in each detail paragraph.
Lexical Resource
There is a reasonable range of trend vocabulary, but several collocations are unnatural or inaccurate, including expressions for surplus, demand, and stable movement.
Prefer standard Task 1 combinations such as exceeded demand, remained stable, fell sharply, and stood at.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of structures is attempted, but article, comparison, preposition, and clause-control errors occur regularly, though meaning remains mostly clear.
Check comparative forms, articles, and complete clause structure, especially when joining several changes in one sentence.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.
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