The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.
Sample Response
The line graph compares the quantity of wheat Australia, Canada, and the European Community exported between 1985 and 1990. Overall, the European Union’s wheat exportsshipping increased over timeover the time while Australia experienced a downward trend in its wheat exportstrading. Although wheat exports of the three given areas fluctuatedhave fluctuated, Canada had the most noticeable oscillations throughout the given period. The European Union exported approximately 17.5 million tonnes of wheat in 1985 and the export fell below 15 million tonnes in the following year. Then, it increased to 15 million tonnes in the subsequent year and remained steady in 1988. EU’s wheat export surged in the next two years and in 1990 its wheat exportstheir wheat export was more than 20 million tonnes. On the other hand, Australia’s wheat export in 1985 was the lowest, 15 million tonnes, among the given three regions. In the year that followed, exports increasedthe import improved by about 1 million tonneswith at least 1 million tonnes before it continuously declined in the subsequent years, hitting the lowest wheat export figure to 12 million tonnesas little as 12 million tonnes in 1990. Canada’s wheat export was the highest of the three given regions in 1985 with nearly 20 million tonnes. The next yearNext year, it decreased to about 17 million tonnes before it significantly increased in the following two years, reaching 25 million tonnes in 1988, the highest. However, in 1989, it plunged to around 5 million tonnestones below its initial wheat exports figure in 1985 and recovered to 18 million tonnessettled to 20 million tones atand the end of the period.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report provides a clear overview of the three contrasting export patterns and supports it with generally accurate chronological detail. The main limitation is occasional imprecision, notably Canada's 1990 figure, together with several awkward collocations and reference errors. Improve by checking each endpoint carefully and using consistent terms such as exports, tonnes and the European Community throughout the description.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and peak are well selected, but Canada's endpoint is overstated and a few approximations are loose.
Verify all six-year endpoints and use exact comparative figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overview and three regional descriptions form a logical progression, although some referencing is mechanical.
Use clearer paragraphing and direct region names where pronouns could be ambiguous.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for trends, but several word choices and collocations are inaccurate.
Use exports rather than shipping, trading or import when describing the series.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are attempted successfully, with recurring agreement, article and possessive-reference errors.
Check pronoun agreement and comparative noun phrases.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.
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