You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop. In your letter: - ask whether the shop has the goods or can order them - ask what the prices are - ask how long the shop can hold the goods for you
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to inquire about the items I would like to purchasegoods I want to purchase from your store. I am looking for a digital photo frame and a crystal flower vase with an electric lightwith electric light in it, which I saw when I visited your shop last time. I would like totwo purchase these items for a friend and give them to herpresent her on her birthday. The digital photo frame should be at least 15 × 1215X12 inches and should come with at least 250 GB of internal memory. The flower vase should be made up of crystal and the twilight blue colour is my preference. It should be medium in size. Please mention the price and product specification in a return mail. Also, let me know if the products are available in your shop, or if you would be able to order themthose from elsewhere. I am coming to Canberra at the beginning of next monthat the beginning of the next month and can come down to your place to purchase those. Would you be able to hold them till then? I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Namrata Jain
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter has a clear purpose, maintains a suitable formal tone, and answers each request with useful product and collection details. Its main limitation is that the body is compressed into one paragraph and contains several conspicuous wording errors, despite remaining easy to understand. The highest priority is to separate the requests logically and proofread key verb forms and object patterns for a more polished message.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are fulfilled directly, with clear descriptions of the goods, a request for prices and availability, and a specified holding period until the next visit.
Make the holding request even more precise by giving the exact collection date rather than referring only to the beginning of next month.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a clear sequence from product identification to availability, price, and collection, but the single body paragraph limits visible grouping.
Use separate paragraphs for product specifications and for the availability, price, and holding questions.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied and specific for the transaction, though two purchase, present her, return mail, and purchase those reduce lexical precision.
Proofread word forms and collocations, replacing these with to purchase, present them to her, reply, and purchase them.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses several accurate complex sentences and polite question forms, with occasional errors in infinitives, pronoun patterns, and phrasing.
Check small grammatical words and verb complements carefully, especially to versus two and the pattern present something to someone.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop. In your letter:
- ask whether the shop has the goods or can order them
- ask what the prices are
- ask how long the shop can hold the goods for you
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