You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter: - introduce yourself - explain what experience and special skills you have - tell him/her when you think you could start
Sample Response
Dear Sir/Madam, I am a 21-year-old student and I am studying Sports Coaching Science at St Mary's University. I have been studying there for the past three years. I am writing to ask if there are any part-time job vacancies at your football club. I really enjoy sport, and my areas of particular interest and experience are football, rugby and cricketFootball, Rugby and Cricket. I have had some experience coaching these sportsexperience of coaching for these sports during my three years at the universityover the past three years that I have been at the University. Last year, I worked duringin the holidays at a football club in my own country. I will be able to provide references from that jobthis summer job and also from my teachers at the university. I would prefer to work in the evenings and at the weekends, as I have classes during the daytime, and I can start atfrom the beginning of November. I look forward to hearing from you soonin the near future. Yours faithfully, Adam Lawerence
Why this response received Band 8.0
The letter is direct, appropriately formal, and complete, with convincing details about the applicant’s studies, coaching experience, references, availability, and start date. Its main limitation is the lack of visible paragraph breaks, which makes an otherwise well-sequenced application look denser than necessary. The highest-priority refinement is to group the introduction, qualifications, and availability into separate paragraphs while preserving the concise professional tone.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response fully achieves its purpose by introducing the applicant, detailing relevant experience and skills, and stating precise availability and a start date in a suitable formal tone.
Strengthen the application slightly by naming one concrete coaching responsibility or achievement that demonstrates the claimed skills.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses naturally from the application purpose through qualifications and references to availability, with cohesive links that remain unobtrusive.
Add clear paragraph breaks between the introduction, experience, availability, and closing to improve visual organisation.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied, precise, and appropriate for a formal job enquiry, with effective expressions related to vacancies, coaching, references, and availability.
Refine minor presentation choices by using consistent lower-case names for sports when they are not proper nouns.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of sentence forms is handled accurately, including relative, time, and reason clauses, with only very minor lapses.
Maintain this control while trimming occasional repetition, such as repeated references to the past three years.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter:
- introduce yourself
- explain what experience and special skills you have
- tell him/her when you think you could start
Your response
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