You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar. In your letter: - ask for information about the seminar dates - ask for details of the programme - ask about accommodation - ask about the cost
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is John Muller and I have recently sawnoticed an advertisement in a local newspaper regarding a seminar on Labour Laws that you are going to organise in Dubai. As an HR professional from Vietnam, II, being an HR professional from Vietnam, would like to participate in this seminar to enhance my knowledge. I am writing this letter to seek further information about the seminarregarding this. As this seminar will be held in Dubai, I would like to ask for the exact seminar datesthe exact schedule as I have to arrange leave from work accordinglyapply for a leave accordingly from my work. Furthermore, I would like to know about the content of the programmeprogram and what aspects of labour laws will be covered in the seminar. Could you also inform meMoreover, inform me of the registration fee and whether I can register online. As I will be travelling from Vietnam and do not know anyone in Dubai, I would like to ask whether accommodation will be arranged for participantswhether you will arrange the accommodation for the participants or not. How much the accommodation, transportation and meals might cost? I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, John Muller
[Author - Prabhjot Singh ]
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter clearly establishes the writer's professional interest and requests all required information about dates, content, accommodation, and costs. Its strongest feature is comprehensive task coverage in an appropriately formal register; the main limitation is one-paragraph presentation and a few abrupt or awkward questions. Prioritise grouped, courteous requests in separate paragraphs and remove the unrelated author attribution.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, all four bullet points are fully addressed, and the formal tone is generally appropriate for the seminar organiser.
Phrase every request courteously and omit the postscript identifying a different author, which is unrelated to the letter's purpose.
Coherence and Cohesion
The requests follow a logical sequence from schedule and programme to fees and accommodation, but the single paragraph and repetitive linkers reduce clarity.
Use an opening paragraph, one paragraph for seminar details, one for travel and accommodation costs, and a brief closing.
Lexical Resource
A good range of relevant professional and seminar vocabulary is used, with occasional awkward collocations.
Use natural phrases such as 'saw an advertisement', 'request leave from work', 'programme fee', and 'accommodation arrangements'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied sentence forms are handled with good overall control, despite minor article, word-order, and question-formation issues.
Revise the final question to 'Could you also tell me how much accommodation, transport, and meals are likely to cost?'
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar. In your letter:
- ask for information about the seminar dates
- ask for details of the programme
- ask about accommodation
- ask about the cost
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