Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?
Sample Response
There is an ongoing debate about whether competition or cooperation in academic and workplace settingsregular academic and workplace "competition" or "cooperation" produces more positive outcomesbrings about more positivity, and which one should be encouraged. While some favour competition in schools and professional arenas, others advocate for cooperation. In this essay, we will discuss both viewpoints. PersonallyPersonally, however, I favour collaboration rather than competitioncollaboration and teamwork rather than competition and rivalry.
On the one hand, academic competitioncompetition in academies encourages students to study more diligentlyattentively and become one of the top scorers. Without competition and clear rewardsWithout the contest and clear winners, most learners will not work hard. For instance, schools that rank students based on their performance and offerbased on their performance, and offer prizes for top performerstalents generally create a more competitive yet conducive study environment than their counterparts. The same goes for workplaces where most employees would not put in their best effort had there been no appraisal for promotion, competition and rewards.
On the other handOn the contrary, those who favour cooperation over competitioncooperation rather than contest argue thatput forward their opinion that collaboration is a much more powerful tool than rivalry as it teaches valuable skills such asvaluable skills like teamwork and partnershipteamwork, and partnership and brings learners and professionals together to achieve a common goal. Thus, when learners study togetherThus when learners study together and share their knowledge and help each other, they learn far more than those who never study in a group or share their notes and knowledge. The same problem can have multiple solutions and learners understand all of them and can find the best solution throughby discussion rather than keeping them hidden due to fierce competition. Similarly, employees in an officeSimilarly, employees in an office, for instance, achieve more and solve more complex problems when they work together.
In conclusion, cooperation is a much more powerful instrument than rivalry as the former produces better outcomesbrings more positive results and thus should be encouraged in workplaces and schools.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response’s strongest feature is its clear, sustained preference for cooperation, supported by parallel discussion of schools and workplaces. Its main limitation is that several claims about motivation and learning are too absolute, while occasional awkward wording reduces precision. Prioritise qualifying these generalisations and directly comparing situations in which cooperation produces better outcomes than competition, using one specific example to strengthen the evaluation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are discussed directly, the opinion is clear throughout, and relevant explanations cover academic and workplace contexts, though some claims are overgeneralised.
Qualify statements that most students or employees need competition and use a concrete example to demonstrate why cooperation is ultimately more effective.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically organised into focused paragraphs and progresses clearly, with minor awkwardness in transitions and a densely developed third paragraph.
Use “On the other hand” rather than “On the contrary” and split the cooperation discussion into clearer stages of skill development and practical outcomes.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is broad and generally precise across education and employment, although a few collocations such as “brings about more positivity” and “top talents” sound unnatural.
Prefer natural expressions such as “produces better outcomes,” “high-achieving students,” and “performance-based promotion.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of sentence forms is handled with good control, while occasional punctuation and parallel-structure problems remain.
Refine long coordinated sentences by removing unnecessary commas and keeping list items grammatically parallel, especially in the cooperation paragraph.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?
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