Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sample Response

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Pollution has become a major concernbecomes a major concern in society all over the world. In society, not only an individual but also groups of people live. In society, it is everyone’s responsibility to protect the environment. Environmental problems caused by pollution, for example, fuel gases, cutting of trees, gases released by factories. The government should take responsibility to reduce pollution in order to protect the environment. Every individual who lives in societywho is leaving in society should take responsibility to participate in protecting the environment. Firstly, people should plant trees around their homesgrow trees in their houses, properties and neighbourhoodspremises and colonies. By growing trees there are huge advantages, for example, most of the polluted gases took over by trees and they release the oxygen. No one should throwEveryone should not throw wastethe wastages on roads and should maintainon the roads, maintain a healthy environment by using dustbinsthe dustbins. At the same time if we consider the government’s role: the government has the authoritygovernment have authority to protect the environment. By planting treesBy planting the trees in many placesall over the places, for example, government-owned sitesall government places, beside roadsbesides the roads, schools, and parks etc., to my knowledge,what I know this type of programme is calledthis type of programme called a clean and green environment. Thus, pollutionThus the pollution can be controlled. Cleanliness is very important to maintain a healthy environment; hence, the government, hence government should instruct cleanersemphasise the cleaners to clean the area thoroughly. Should place the dustbin every street and educate the individuals by advertisements. Inspect the houses every month to check how the individuals maintain their houses so that the individuals reflect themselves and self-correct themselves. Conduct environmental talks in the school, that individual learns everything from childhood onwards in the school. I believed that it is every individual’s responsibility to solve the environmental problems, however, impossible for only one individual in the society. So that government should take actions to solve the environmental problems but encourage every individual to takes part in all those activities.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.0

The response maintains a relevant central view that both governments and individuals must act, and it supplies several practical examples. However, the two requested views are only partially distinguished, ideas are repetitive, and the single-block structure combines with frequent sentence-level errors to weaken clarity. The highest priority is to organise the argument into clear paragraphs that separately explain each view, then support each with accurately formed sentences.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

5.5
Scoring rule

The response addresses both individual and government action and gives an opinion, but the opposing views are only partly explained and development is repetitive.

Next step

Explain why individuals alone may be insufficient and why government action still depends on collective participation before stating a reasoned opinion.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

5.0
Scoring rule

The main message is traceable, but the lack of paragraphing and weak sequencing make the progression mechanical and occasionally confusing.

Next step

Use separate introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, with one clearly ordered central idea in each body paragraph.

LR

Lexical Resource

5.0
Scoring rule

The response has enough environmental vocabulary to convey its main points, but frequent inaccurate word choices and repetition limit precision.

Next step

Build control of natural collocations such as "industrial emissions," "household waste," and "raise public awareness."

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0
Scoring rule

Some sentence variety is attempted, but frequent fragments, agreement errors, and article or verb-form mistakes weaken accuracy.

Next step

Prioritise complete subject-verb sentences and check articles, agreement, and verb forms before attempting longer structures.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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