Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
It’s widely believed in today’s materialistic world that the latest fashion trendslatest innovative fashion trends are highly significanthold great significance. On the other hand, such trends are believed to be set solely to generate profits for large fashion companiesset only in the pursuit of profits for large designer companies. It seems that people are nowin recent times, people are now changing their minds with regard toin regards to wearing clothes for comfort and as a personal choice. Personally, I agree that we should pay more attention to individuality and comfort in the way we dress. Firstly, fashion designs exist as a form of artistic expressioncreative artistic expression of the designer. Although this may be true, undoubtedly such designs undermine individualitytake away individuality once a trend becomes establishedonce a trend is set in place. By this, I mean that there is nothing unique about wearing what everybody else does. More specifically, if everyone sports the latest colour and design in summer skirts, do we not look the same? Secondly, itIt is possible that fashion trends can look extremely stylish to the general public. However, it can be argued that the main purpose of wearing clothes is for functional reasonsfor more functional reasons. This is primarily due to the fact that clothes were traditionally worn to protect people from climatic conditions. For instance, clothes are still worn basically to keep people warm and dry in winter and cool in summer. Finally, fashion certainly gives us a sense of confidence and pride in our appearance. While this is certainly a good point, it also means that following such changeable trends proves to be expensive. For example, purchasing every latest season’s fashion item will, of course, blow the budget of many young people. In conclusion, there are various arguments to support the dismissal of fashion trends, consisting of not conforming, comfort and price, which I strongly agree with.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response has a clear, consistent position and supports it with three relevant reasons, particularly the points about individuality and cost. Its main limitation is that the argument is presented as one continuous paragraph, making the progression feel mechanical despite generally effective linking. The highest-priority improvement is to organise each main idea into a distinct paragraph and develop the relationship between commercial fashion trends and personal choice more precisely.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported with several relevant, adequately extended reasons and examples.
Develop the commercial purpose of fashion trends more directly and connect it more explicitly to the case for personal choice.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a logical sequence, but the single-paragraph presentation and formulaic sequencing weaken overall organisation.
Use separate introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, with each body paragraph centred on one developed reason.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently varied vocabulary conveys the argument precisely, although a few collocations and concluding phrases are awkward.
Refine combinations such as references to seasonal purchases and express the final list of reasons in more natural wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex structures is used with generally strong control and only occasional non-impeding errors.
Proofread for small accuracy issues in capitalization, prepositions, and noun phrase construction.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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