Healthcare cost is increasing, and many governments are finding it difficult to balance their healthcare budget. To tackle this issue, some people suggest that citizens should be solely responsible for their own healthcare costs with private health insurance, while others suggest that the government should provide free health services for all. Disccuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
A health care system is a very important part of a country as it is a key feature of developed countrieskey factor for the developed countries. Some countries take responsibility fortake the responsibility of citizens' healththe citizen's health and provide free medical care whereas other countries think it is an individual’s responsibility. I would support the second opinion as I believe that health insurancethe health insurance is affordable and it helps to get better servicesthe better services.
"Nothing is free in this world", this saying is true when it comes to free medical services. Though some countries provide free medical facilities, they indirectly get that money from civilians through taxesvia tax. For instance, in Australia healthcarethe health service is completely free; however,completely free, however, the income tax is as high as 35%. On the other hand, insurancethe insurance could be economical. For example, a person earninga person is earning a thousand dollars a week can afford 50 dollars for the insurance premium. Moreover, if the income increases, this does not necessarily mean thatit is not mandatory that the premium would also increase. It is understood that some people might not be able to afford health expenses. However, due to growing competition between insurance companies, many affordable plans are available in the market. It could be argued that if an individual has to pay for their healthcarepay for his health, he can ignore it and that could result in an unhealthy nation in the long runin long-run. However, a free service could encourage unnecessary visitsthe unnecessary visits as well. It is certainly an individual's responsibility to take care of his own health. Moreover, if hospitals have only those patients who are unwell then they could provide better service. For example, when a hospital has one hundred patients out of which only thirty patients are sick, the hospital still hashospitals still has to spend a considerable amount of time with other seventy patients. Patients who are actually sick could receive a far better service and attention if the remaining seventy could be eliminated. I believe a government could focus more on other areas like infrastructure development where individual cannot contribute. Health care issue could be taken care by people with the help of insurance and better lifestyle.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay maintains a clear preference for privately funded healthcare and supports it with relevant points about taxation, insurance affordability, and pressure on hospitals. Its main limitation is that the case for government-funded care is acknowledged only briefly, while some examples rely on doubtful assumptions. The highest-priority improvement is to develop the opposing view fairly before explaining why the chosen position remains stronger.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a clear opinion and relevant supporting ideas, but the argument for free government healthcare is much less fully developed than the preferred view.
Give a distinct, well-supported explanation of why universal public care could benefit people who cannot afford private insurance before rebutting it.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas generally progress from taxation and affordability to individual responsibility and hospital demand, though the very long body paragraph weakens organisation.
Divide the discussion into separate paragraphs for public provision, private responsibility, and the final evaluation of the two views.
Lexical Resource
The essay has sufficient vocabulary for healthcare financing and personal responsibility, but several collocations and references are awkward or imprecise.
Use more natural phrases such as publicly funded healthcare, insurance premiums, and unnecessary appointments, and avoid referring to patients as people who could be eliminated.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates the argument, but recurring errors with articles, agreement, and clause construction reduce accuracy.
Proofread noun phrases and verb patterns, especially forms such as a person earning, hospitals still have, and issues could be taken care of.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Healthcare cost is increasing, and many governments are finding it difficult to balance their healthcare budget. To tackle this issue, some people suggest that citizens should be solely responsible for their own healthcare costs with private health insurance, while others suggest that the government should provide free health services for all. Disccuss both views and give your own opinion.
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