Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
One school of thought is that the best approach for child’s development is that if parents teach their children themselves at home. On the other hand, another school of thoughtthe second school of thought is that children should attend school for better developmentfor their better development. There is no general consensus on this issueconsensus over this and both approaches have advantages.
Let’s see the advantages of the first approach. It is understood that no one can better understand their child except his/her parents. A child has been with their parents since birthis with the parents since birth and parents know every aspecteach and every aspect of the child. While teacher has to teach the whole class and take every student along with including slow learners and fast learners. Parents, however,Whereas parents have one child to teach and they can give him/her their full attentiontheir hundred percent attention. They can schedule the teaching according toas per their child’s pace. Moreover, parents can better look after the child.
The other approach is school attendanceAnother approach is attending school. This method has its own advantages. In school, a child has to spend theirhis time in classin the class with other children of the same age. The childHe/she starts making new friends. They not only talk about studies but also discuss other eventshappenings around them. They share knowledge and information with each other. All the children take part in group activities andincluding extracurricular activities. As a result, their confidence increases many times overmany folds.
As we have seen, both methods have their own advantages. However, I strongly feel that it is vitalvery vital for children to attend school. This way, school and parents share the responsibility for the child's developmentresponsibility of development of the child and school attendance is the best approachit is the best approach.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response covers both approaches and gives a clear preference for school, with a straightforward progression from home teaching to classroom benefits. Its main limitation is that several ideas, especially the final opinion, remain general, while repetitive wording and frequent sentence-level errors reduce precision. The highest priority is to explain why the preferred sharing of responsibility produces better development, using one specific comparison and more accurately controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both methods' advantages are addressed and a clear opinion is given, though the justification for that preference is only briefly developed.
Explain more fully why attending school while retaining parental support is superior, using a specific developmental outcome.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure and broad progression are clear, but some linking is mechanical and several short statements interrupt the flow.
Connect supporting sentences through clearer cause-and-effect relationships instead of repeatedly introducing points as separate assertions.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for the topic and includes some less common items, but repetition and awkward expressions limit precision.
Use more varied language for children and development, and replace unnatural phrases such as "increases many folds" with accurate collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex forms, but fragments, missing articles, and awkward clause structures occur frequently.
Turn the "While" and "Whereas" fragments into complete comparative sentences and check articles and pronoun agreement throughout.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.
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