Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?
Sample Response
Compared with people in the past, we are far less concerned withwe concern far less on the preparation of food today, thanks to the development of agriculture and scientific technology. A fair amount of beneficial influence is occurring to us consequently.
The first to be benefited are travellers. It has been much probable for one to carry out the plan of a trip or expedition to remote areas. As a matter of fact, diverse types of food are designeda diverse type of food are designed for outdoor trips, for example, compressed biscuitsbiscuit. Without worrying about starvationstarving, a traveller can travela man can push it to the limit wherever he would like to go -- Mount Everest or the South Pole. For most peoplemost common people, it has become possibleit has been realistic to put their energy mainly on other areas, such as work or personal interestsother aspects, work or interest, rather than on deciding what to eatrather than what to have for meals. Some prefer working all the time in order to earn as much money as they can. Others develop their interests or hobbies like sports, musicalmusic instruments, or photographyphotographing. Whatever people choose to spend time on, they feel their lives are satisfying and fulfilling. People’s attitudes toward life matureAttitude toward life matures as well. Humans are no longer bothered with the preparation of food. Our focus now is to improve living standardsthe standard of life: how to make things more effective? Thus, numerous significant achievements have taken place recently in every fieldsubject. Science and technologySciences and technologies, arts and humanities are advancing rapidlyswiftly striding forward and still accelerating. Therefore, without being concerned aboutwithout concerning about food preparation, the pattern of human developmentevolvement changes fundamentally. To conclude, the benefits to both individuals and the whole human race areis clearly demonstrated. And I believe that food preparation will account for even less in our lives in the future.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response gives a clear affirmative answer and develops several relevant benefits, with the travel example providing its most concrete support. The argument becomes overgeneralised and loses focus when it links easier food preparation to progress across all fields, while frequent awkward collocations reduce precision; the priority is to organise two well-supported benefits in separate paragraphs and express them in more natural language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and relevant benefits are explained, although later claims about broad human progress are overgeneralised and insufficiently supported.
Develop two plausible benefits with specific cause-and-effect explanation instead of extending the argument to sweeping claims about human advancement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas generally progress from travellers to wider personal benefits and a conclusion, but one oversized paragraph and some abrupt shifts weaken organisation.
Separate the traveller example, everyday time savings, and conclusion into distinct paragraphs with clear topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of ambitious vocabulary, but recurrent inaccurate collocations and word forms make the expression unnatural.
Prioritise precise natural combinations such as "worry less about food preparation," "musical instruments," and "human development."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex structures is used, but errors in agreement, articles, complements, and verb forms occur throughout.
Edit systematically for subject-verb agreement and verb patterns, especially forms such as "a diverse range of foods is" and "without worrying about."
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?
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