Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?

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Sample Response

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With advances in technologyWith the advantages of technology, humansthe human has shifted to a lifestyle in which individuals' desireindividual requirement for delicious food has emerged not just to satisfy hungerfulfil the hunger. They want to enjoy a diverse range of foods with varied tasteswith a varying taste and have therefore createdand for that have invented many new and complex recipes. They want to do it easily and swiftly with the help of modern tools and technology. Has this really improved our lifestyle or has it done more harmor has done more harms? Let us examine this in the following essay. People want to enjoy diverse types of fooda diverse type of food - prepare them at home or eat at expensive restaurants. People want to try new cuisines both at home and at restaurants and they want to be served promptly. This is where the modern equipment plays a parttakes part in, and food preparation nowadays is easier and faster and this has definitely enhanced our lifestyle as it allows us to enjoy food, not just satisfy our hungertummy. Moreover, modern tools like the rice cooker, microwave oven, slicer, mixer, electric heater and so on make the cooking process quick and convenient. This saves a great deal of time unlike the past when someone had to be busy all day to prepare meals for the family. People now have more time for recreation, hobbies and for the family. For students, busy corporate employeesbusy corporates, businessmen and researchers, this improvement remarkably enhances their lifestyle. On the downside, the advancements in food preparation methods have led to the growth of the fast-food industryfast food industries and their restaurants pop uppop-up everywhere, like mushrooms after the rain. This might seem convenient for those who do not have time to prepare food at home, but the health hazards are even greater. The obesity rate is skyrocketing in Westernwestern countries and more people, these days, are suffering from health-related issues. In conclusion, the latest technology has undeniably improved the an individual's standard of livingquality of an individual’s living standard but not without a cost. To make the best of this development we have to avoid junk food but prepare more nutritious food at home.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response answers the question directly, maintains a clear view, and develops relevant benefits of easier food preparation while acknowledging a credible health cost. Its strongest feature is the use of concrete appliances and lifestyle consequences to support the argument. The main limitation is presentation as one unbroken paragraph, compounded by recurring awkward grammar and word combinations; organise the reasoning into purposeful paragraphs and refine sentence accuracy.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

The question is fully addressed with a consistent position, relevant benefits, a considered drawback, and supporting examples.

Next step

Make the evaluation still sharper by explicitly weighing the health disadvantage against the time and convenience benefits before concluding.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

Ideas progress logically through benefits, a drawback, and a conclusion, but the entire response is presented as one paragraph.

Next step

Separate the introduction, main benefits, health drawback, and conclusion into distinct paragraphs with clear internal focus.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

The response uses a reasonably broad range of topic vocabulary, although several collocations and word choices are awkward or imprecise.

Next step

Refine phrases such as 'the human,' 'diverse type of food,' and 'busy corporates' into natural, precise academic English.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

Complex structures are used with generally clear meaning, but errors in articles, agreement, clause formation, and punctuation recur.

Next step

Edit each complex sentence for complete clause structure and accurate determiners, verb forms, and punctuation before adding further detail.

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