Some people say that rich nations should help poor countries with their basic needs like food and education while others oppose the idea and argue that the poor nation themselves should try to improve their condition. Do you agree with the idea that rich and developed nations should help the poor nations? Write no less than 250 words.
Sample Response
Today’s world is divided into industrialised and developing countries, with the main difference beingwhere the main difference between them is the amount of money they spend on the healthcare system, education and infrastructureinfrastructures. Most citizens in developing nations live belowunder the poverty line and, in my opinion, rich countries have the ability and should take responsibilitytake up the responsibility of supporting them.
It is true that governments of developing nations should take care of their citizens. However, since those countries are burdened by debtburied into debts as a result of unbalancedunbalances finances, Rich countries are more equipped to help less fortunate nationsfewer fortune nations than these nations’ own governmentsthan their own governments. For example, industrialised countries can help poorer nations with some loans or grants that enable them to pay offenable them paying off their debts. In addition, many poor countries live in subhuman conditions because of extreme poverty and epidemic diseases like AIDS and choleraCholera. They lack sufficient knowledge and medical resourcesthe knowledge and the sufficient medical resources to tackle such problems. However, developed countriesHowever developed countries can donate free medicines to themdonate them free medicines and send skilled doctors and nurses. On the other hand, people from many developing countries migrate to wealthy nations to study or to work. Rich countries benefit from these immigrantsbenefit out of those foreigners. For example, many immigrants to France and the UK have provenproved themselves in those countries by working hard. But on the other side, the economies of immigrants’ countries get worse because their countries lose them while they are needed to lead their nations to a better future. Therefore, it seems sensibleit seems to be sensible that rich countries support the immigrants’ home countries. In conclusion, I believe it would be difficult to see any economic progressprogress in the economy of developing countries without the cooperation fromof rich nations.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear, consistent position and supports it with several relevant avenues for international assistance, including finance, healthcare, and compensation for brain drain. Its main limitation is language control: frequent awkward collocations and word-form errors, together with an overlong body paragraph, reduce precision and readability. The priority is to divide the reasoning into focused paragraphs and revise each sentence for accurate vocabulary and grammatical patterns.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear throughout and is supported by multiple relevant, generally developed reasons and examples.
Deepen the argument by explaining safeguards that would make financial and medical assistance effective rather than simply listing forms of aid.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a broadly logical sequence, but almost all development is compressed into one long body paragraph and some transitions are mechanical.
Separate financial aid, medical aid, and migration into distinct focused paragraphs with clear topic sentences and concise internal progression.
Lexical Resource
The response shows sufficient range for the topic, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce precision.
Replace phrases such as unbalances finances, fewer fortune nations, and benefit out of with accurate forms such as financial imbalances, less fortunate nations, and benefit from.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys meaning clearly overall, although article, preposition, capitalization, and verb-pattern errors recur.
Edit systematically for verb complements, articles, and sentence boundaries, especially in structures such as enable them to pay and donate free medicines to them.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that rich nations should help poor countries with their basic needs like food and education while others oppose the idea and argue that the poor nation themselves should try to improve their condition. Do you agree with the idea that rich and developed nations should help the poor nations? Write no less than 250 words.
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